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Michael G asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 9 years ago

Would you rate my poem? First one in a while.?

My Broken Soul

I lie in the wake of misery.

I swim in the depths of my despair.

I once held to courageous intent.

Yet the ropes lie broken there.

I once had a dream

I once had a goal

Now lying crushed before me

Thus, my broken soul

My heart a lie

My soul no more

Nothing else

Worth waiting for

Bleeding before me

The face looks back

At my selfless body

Without a tact

No more hope

No more beauty

A life fit for a beast

A life – dead in me

The sight fades from me

My eyes grow dim

Not with truth of word

But soul within

This love no more

Has caused me to

Love no more

No love now due

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  • 9 years ago
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    I'll rate it a 2 out of 10. Good for you for trying poetry, but you need to work on the art; who are you reading?

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