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David
Lv 6
David asked in Society & CultureLanguages · 8 years ago

Please help me with English?

I am learning english and have to write this paragraph. I know it has so many grammar errors, Please revise it and help me to make it better and good.Thanks a lot

I realized Wancy was a good guy and he was always helping others. We used to work together a lot such as visiting our church brothers and sisters, visiting people at hospitals or jails, decorating church for holidays such as Christmas , mother’s day, father’s day. Wancy was one of our church leaders and he liked to make poems, he would say them at church’s activities like mother’s day, etc.On a mother’s day, he made a beautiful poem and he told me that , Omg I got to hear it before everybody else. I felt so special because he liked me already and trust me as well.

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  • 8 years ago

    I realized Wancy was a good guy and he was always helping others. We used to work together a lot ON OCCASIONS such as visiting our church brothers and sisters, visiting people at hospitals or jails, decorating church for holidays such as Christmas , mother’s day, father’s day. Wancy was one of our church leaders and he liked to WRITE poems, he would TELL them at church’s activities like mother’s day, etc. On a mother’s day, he WROTE a beautiful poem and he told me that I got to hear it before everybody else. I felt so special because he liked me already and trustED me as well.

  • 8 years ago

    I soon realized Wancy was a good guy as he was always helping others. We used to work together a lot, such as visiting our church, brothers and sisters, visiting people at hospitals or jails. We would decorate the church for Christmas, mother’s day and father’s day. Wancy was one of our church leaders and he liked to write poems, he would read them at church’s activities like mother’s day, etc. On a mother��s day, he made a beautiful poem and he told me that, I had got to hear it before everybody else did. I felt so special, because he liked me and trusted me as a friend as well.

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  • Diana
    Lv 7
    8 years ago

    It's pretty good. I suggest just a few minor changes. Here's my version of it:

    Wancy was a good guy and he was always helping others. We used to work together a lot visiting our church brothers and sisters, visiting people at hospitals or in jails, decorating the church for holidays such as Christmas, Mother’s Day, and Father’s Day. Wancy was one of our church leaders and he liked to write poems, which he would read at church’s activities such as those on Mother’s Day, etc. One Mother’s Day, he made a beautiful poem which he read to me. Omg I got to hear it before everybody else. I felt so special because he already liked and trusted me.

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