Please help me to revise this English paragraph.Thanks?

You write a lot of long sentences. Your first sentence would work better if it wasn't so long. As it is, you give the impression of rambling,

"told wancy" -- missed a capital letter

"get marry there" - get married there" -- pay attention to tense

"So He told me" --random capitalization??, if you are attempting to put emphasis on 'he', just don't it's not advised

"So He told me, he would come to pick me up on February 24, 2006 and we would move to Denver and get marry there." -- another sentence that would be better off split

There are any number of ways in which this could be edited, so here is one example:

I felt sad and disappointed after talking with my mother because she was not supportive of my planned marriage to Wancy. I wanted my mother to be happy, not angry. Minutes later, I called Wancy and told him about my conversation with her. Wancy asked me if I really wanted to marry him, and I said, 'Yes." Wancy then told me that he would arrive to pick me up on February 24, 2006, and that we would move to Denver and get married in Colorado. Those were the hardest days of my life because my mother was no longer talking to me.

Best wishes!

You have run on sentences, and a few grammatical errors. It's okay, just continue writing, and you'll get better. :-) I'll show you ways you could correct certain things.

1) "I felt really sad and disappointed after talking with my mom because she was not supporting my wedding with Wancy and I wanted her to be happy with me not mad."

Correction: This was a run on sentence, so breaking it apart would be necessary.

"I felt really sad and disappointed after talking with my mom, since she was not supporting my wedding with Wancy".

2) "Minutes later, I got on the phone and told wancy about my conversation with my mom. Wancy asked me if I really wanted to marry him and I said yes."

Correction: "I got on the phone with Wancy minutes later to discuss my conversation with my mom, and he questioned whether I wanted to marry him. However, I said yes."

3) "So He told me, he would come to pick me up on February 24, 2006 and we would move to Denver and get marry there. Those were the hardest days of my life because my mom was not talking to me anymore."

Correction: "Wancy said he would pick me up on February 24, 2006 to move and get married in Denver. Those were the hardest days of my life, since my mom was not speaking to me anymore.

I wanted my mom to be happy about my wedding plans with Wency. After talking with her, though, she was unsupportive of the plans and mad; and I was really sad and disappointed by her reaction. Shortly after our discussion I spoke with Wency and told him about the discussion with my mother. He asked if I really wanted to marry him. I said, "yes, I do." So, he told me he would pick me up on February 24th and we would go to Denver to get married. He said that we would move there too. Those days were the hardest ones of my life. My mom is not happy and we are not even talking anymore.

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