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can you help me with this short paragraph?

I think this short paragraph needs a title and a conclusion

So, if you please help me with that and tell me if there is mistakes

this paragraph supposed to be about cheating :)

The person who betrays their partner and cheats is thought of as a selfish and unappreciative person. One of the most common reasons people cheat is because they feel unappreciated, and look outside their relationship for love and comfort. Another reason is for revenge, when the partner seeks to retaliate by doing the same thing. If a partner can't forgive, they should get out of the relationship. As there is little or no love and affection left.

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  • Anonymous
    8 years ago
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    You really don't need a title for a paragraph. As far as conclusions go, all you need is to combine the last two sentences. Corrections: "The person who betrays their partner and cheats is thought of..." would sound better (and be more accurate since their are other ways to betray a partner) stated as "The person who betrays their partner by cheating can be thought of..." I've changed the is thought of to can be thought of because it's never safe to assume you know what the reader is,does or will be thinking. Separate the next two sentences into four. "One of the most common reasons people cheat is feeling unappreciated. Perceived lack of appreciation causes the person to look for it outside of the relationship. Another common reason for cheating is retaliation. This is when a person cheats on their partner because they suspect or know the partner has cheated. If love and forgiveness cannot be exchanged afyer these scenarios, the relationship should be terminated".

    Hope that helps =)

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