Is this University academic appeal letter good enough?

Hi James,

experiencing these situations,..............being suspended has taught me a very

I think there is a few more error also I would prove to the uni that you are taking action now to deal with some of your problems instead of dating that you will. As this shows that even if they do not take you back you are taking action to better yourself regardless of the out come of getting back into uni. i.e pay for for a therapy session and attach a receipt or something OR contact the uni's support services ...ask find out if you can't find one. Actions speaks louder than words.

Good luck

much better written than most that get posted on here

one correction.. instead of "some depression periods"... either use "some periods of depression" or use "some depressive periods" --- and the sentence that phrase is in needs proper, grammatically correct formatting

Over the course of 2012, I have been through many situations such as financial trouble, family crisis, some depressive episodes, and learning to cope with higher levels of maturity.

although... honestly.... learning to cope with levels of immaturity... doesn't sound good... it sounds like you are not growing into responsibility

and there are several other errors... go through this with a very critical eye....

ask someone to sit down with you in-person and go over it like an editor would

helps is one example.. should be help

however, what you have in the letter is not substantial enough to grant your appeal at most schools

were you treated for depression? how can you show the depression has improved (under treatment, taking medications, in counseling) to the point that it will not likely be a problem in the future

family crisis... was it substantial enough to have a considerable effect... did one of your parents die... did the family home get hit by a tornado... if it was worthy of mention, & if it was extreme enough to be considered a major extenuating factor... then you need more info & you also need proof

while it is good to mention financial trouble... it is important the you know financial trouble is one of those things on list of reasons that financial aid appeal can't be granted for... unless there are major extenuating circumstances to go with it (home lost due to tornado)

maturity level is also one of those things that you don't get a second chance on

The logic (just so you know where the federal government is coming from when they say these are not eligible reasons for approving an appeal):

if you were not mature enough then... who's to say you are mature enough now... students who are given fin aid often do not value what it means... so remove their aid, make them put their own skin into the game (pay for it themselves) and see how quickly they mature & appreciate the aid

if you had financial trouble... who's to say it is resolved? who's to say you can even afford to be in school? many students work full-time while in school full-time... if they can deal with financial trouble, then why couldn't you?

same kind of thing with not be prepared, not seeking help, struggling due to lack of direction, not pushing yourself to your full potential, etc....

also: if study skills are a problem... then enroll in (pay for if necessary) a good study skills class.. not just read about it in the library... invest in it.. show your skin is now in the game

It behooves them to get rid of you now as opposed to later. Unless English is your second language you have no business being at this school. Your use of English Tenses is very poor. You need some remedial English before you can further your education. Your letter will only server to prove to them that they made the right choice in dismissing you from the school.