Yahoo Answers is shutting down on May 4th, 2021 (Eastern Time) and beginning April 20th, 2021 (Eastern Time) the Yahoo Answers website will be in read-only mode. There will be no changes to other Yahoo properties or services, or your Yahoo account. You can find more information about the Yahoo Answers shutdown and how to download your data on this help page.

How does this sound for a back cover?

Title: Destiny And Faith Get A Summer Job

Back Cover: When Destiny and Faith meet a new kid in the neighborhood who happens to be deaf they get a chance put their knowledge of ASL to use. Together the three friends try to find a summer job.

But what will they end up with? Car wash? Lemonade stand? Or cleaning a spooky old house?

Just want some thoughts on it. Thanks in advance!

Update:

The plot is about the three kids trying to find a summer job, but with every new job they get a series of laughable disasters happens.

Is one of the kids being deaf something I should leave out?

Update 2:

Oh, it is a children's book for the 6-10 age group. I forgot to mention that.

5 Answers

Relevance
  • Banana
    Lv 5
    8 years ago
    Favorite Answer

    Just needs a little rewording. This is one of the hardest parts anyway.

    When Destiny and Faith meet the new kid in the neighborhood who is deaf, they get a chance put their knowledge of sign language to use. Together the three friends try to find a summer job.

    But what will they end up with? Car wash? Lemonade stand? Or cleaning a spooky old house?

    It could use some elaboration, just a little bland, but it's on its way!

    Keep working on it and good luck!

    -Bree

    Edit

    yeah, if it's a kids book, you're defineatly fine. I think I, personally would leave out the deaf character and be more on the line of-

    "Three friends go on an adventure of their life time. That adventure just happens to have been a summer job hunt that takes devastating, but laughable turns at every corner. -talk a little about each said disaster such as "Whether it be a car wash with no bubbles, a lemonade stand with no lemons and a cleaning job at the spookiest house in the neighborhood, these kids get into all the trouble and even more of the fun...." etc etc.

    I hope that helps. BTW I clearly have no idea what actually happens at any of those things, they were just examples :):):)

    Source(s): author of "At First Glance"
  • 8 years ago

    Make sure it's obvious, at least on the back cover, that they are people, not the biblical version. Also it doesn't sound as interesting as it may be. Perhaps add something else that happens and then not say the outcome of that. And if something else does happen, other than getting a job, don't use that title. Use something more catchy. And I'm just guessing, but my thoughts are cleaning the spooky house.

  • 8 years ago

    You need to put at least one more paragraph, all the job possibilities are good. Starting a car wash is excellent though!

    An inspiring story idea, as well as a 'novel' one!

  • 8 years ago

    If this is a children's book, I think you did fine, but I'm a bit confused on the plot.

  • How do you think about the answers? You can sign in to vote the answer.
  • 8 years ago

    It has unnecessary information and run on sentences. It makes the plot sound unorganized and disconnected.

Still have questions? Get your answers by asking now.