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Abel asked in Society & CultureLanguages · 7 years ago

Can you check my errors on this letter please?

To whom it may concern,

I am writing to appeal my insurance that's going to be cut off next year. I am worried of my insurance being dropped, as I mistakenly discontinued it. I am still hoping that you can reinstate my insurance for next year.

I decided to cut it, because I thought Medicare was really intended for elderlies like me, but having no prior knowledge about the program, I still decided to cut Health net just to be on Medicare. After a month, I went to my doctor and she explained about Medicare. I felt surprised and upset, as I just removed my insurance, moreover missed the deadline to renew my insurance. I admit my mistake of not taking necessary precautions of my actions. I have been on Health net for years and I am very much satisfied with the plans and services that I have. I am asking this because I can’t afford losing my insurance at his age.

Please understand that I thought Medicare would be beneficial for me, but I realized that the drawbacks outweigh the benefits. I hope you can give me a second chance, and thank you for considering this appeal.

Sincerely,

I am weak at writing, anyways I feel like I made lots of errors. Pease feel free to check, and if you want to rewrite it, that'd be awesome. its for my mom. thanks :)

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    The letter is pretty good for the most part. Although it can use improvement, it would be difficult to improve it without rewriting the whole thing. Here are some small corrections:

    "I am worried ABOUT my insurance being dropped"

    "I am HOPING THAT YOU CAN STILL REINSTATE my insurance for next year"

    "I can't afford losing my insurance at THIS age"

    You might also want to consider explaining the main reason you don't like Medicare, but I wouldn't know, not being that age. Maybe it's obvious.

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