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Is this good enough for publishing?

I'm a 13 year old. I very serious bout writing storys. Here's a sample of my nw bk i'm writin wich is bout magic (der won't be magic in d sample coz its jst d startin) I jst wnt to know if its gud enuf fr publishing or is it jst lyk a rant novel?Sample :

Chapter 1

My heels clicked on d floor as I walked down d corridor confidently.

All heads turned to luk at me. I had my signature smirk on my face that made boys go weak in d knees.

I flipped my blonde hair to one side of my head & winked at a random freshman boy hu looked lyk he was bout to faint with happiness.

I chuckled slightly. It ws always fun seeing boys go so crazy over me.

Suddenly a pair of arms wrapped around me. I felt.....annoyed.

That's not the reaction most girls have when their boyfriend hugs them but then, I'm not like most girls. And Jade isn't really my boyfriend.

Actually he is, according to everyone else in the school, but to me he's just someone rich enough to buy me Gucci dresses and Channel perfumes. And pay for my petrol bill sometimes.

"Jade! Stop crushing me! You're spoiling my designer dress!" I hissed angrily at him.

"I was just trying to surprise you!" He said looking a little hurt.

"Aww, I'm sorry sweetie!" I said and pulled him into a kiss.

To the onlookers, this kiss was sweet and passionate. But to me?

I just wanted to run as far away from him as I could. I mean, I was smudging my lipstick trying to cheer him up!

Not that I really wanted to cheer him up but in order to get him to do my history project I had to make him happy.

After what seemed like an eternity, we broke away from the kiss.

We just stood there staring into each other's eyes and smiling.....though my brain was screaming at me to run into the girls washroom and fix my make up!

But I had to act lovey-dovey in front of all these people. So hand in hand, Jade and I started walking to our next class.

And then, without a warning, someone poured a bucket of ice cold water on me.

***************

I screamed and woke up with a start. What the hell just happened? I was at school and now I'm....in my bedroom?

Wait, it isn't my bedroom. Panic filled me as I realized I was in a stranger's room.

I tried to think straight and remember what had happened.

I remembered walking with Jade and someone pouring water on me and then ended up here.

My clothes were still wet, I realized.

I looked down at my clothes expecting to see a emerald green dress but instead I saw a rather unflattering brown sweater and track pants. Those clothes weren't mine either!

"Angie." Suddenly someone called my name. My face snapped to the direction of the person and my eyes met the green eyes of someone much younger than me.

"Angie." He called my name again. I frowned suddenly. My name wasn't Angie. My name was Catherine Haling. Or was it?

I suddenly felt so hopelessly confused. I mean, I didn't even know who I was anymore!

"Angie! Get up!" The boy urged me. "Give me a second, Alan." I muttered without thinking. My eyes widened suddenly. How did I know this boy's name?

"You okay, sis?" He asked raising an eyebrow. I was his sister?

I groaned. I had no idea what was going on. Was I suffering from memory loss or something?

Suddenly it all came crashing down at me. "You are not Catherine Haling. You are Angie Dragor." I whispered to myself.

"That was just a dream."

"Whoa, Whoa, Whoa! You were Catherine Haling in your dream?" Alan asked in mock horror.

"Shut up, Alan! And wait till mom hears about you using your water spell on me!" I threatened him.

"Let's see if you can even make it past your bedroom, Angie!" He said laughing as he ran out my room.

I furiously stumbled out of bed and tried to go after him but a water puddle magically appeared and I slipped and fell into it butt first!

I groaned in defeat. I shivered and suddenly realized how wet my clothes had become. I would surely catch a cold now.

Wait a second.

I already had a cold! From the past two days to be exact! This dream had really messed up my memory!

How mean of Alan to perform water spells on me even though he knew that I was sick!

I got up muttering angrily and ran down the stairs to find Alan and give him a piece of my mind.

****

So hw ws it? pls tell me if its publishing worthy

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  • Anonymous
    7 years ago
    Favorite Answer

    I think there's definitely potential, I found that parts of the dream weren't needed and could use a bit of tweaking to make it more professional. However, I found that after she woke up it was very professional and I think the storyline seems realistic (as far as magic goes).

    If you continue writing this story, you could join Wattpad as you can upload your story as you write each chapter. It's a good way to find out what peoples opinion of your writing and storyline is, as they can comment on each chapter. It's a great way to find out reactions to your book.

    It's a great book considering you're 13! Well done :)

    Source(s): My knowledge and a member on wattpad (a lot of reading) :)
  • ?
    Lv 7
    7 years ago

    In order to be published the story has to be unique, with interesting characters and a compelling plot but most of all it needs to be written well. To quote your first sentence, which would be your opening hook:

    'My heels clicked on d floor as I walked down d corridor confidently.'

    Using 'd' instead of 'the' is distracting and lazy, so you have a long way to go. Spelling mistakes and 'text talk' will be the first thing that will get your writing thrown into the slush pile, so work on your grammar first and foremost and maybe someone will take you seriously. Right now, this is nearly impossible to read.

    Good luck.

  • Anonymous
    7 years ago

    There's definitely potential there. The spelling and phrasing of some stuff during the dream was a bit off and could do with some tidying up but other than that the second part was pretty good :) Maybe nit right for publishing now but soon hopefully!

  • 7 years ago

    Publishing is extremely hard to do. Most Publishers wouldn't take this as it is; you need to re-read it, read more novels of other published authors and develop the craft a lot more.

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  • Katie
    Lv 4
    7 years ago

    You need to learn about grammar and how to make things flow better. I suggest fictionpress or Quotev to use, based on your age.

  • 7 years ago

    its not gud enuf fr publishing

    Nobody is interested in a story written in text message.

  • Anonymous
    7 years ago

    If you very serious bout writing storys learn to write.

  • Anonymous
    7 years ago

    it's good but you need to learn to spell before you try and write

  • Anonymous
    7 years ago

    D crap u posted is d crap. Throw it in d toilet.

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