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ANYONE HAVE WATTPAD PLEASE READ MY BOOK!?!!?
Its basically about a girl named Kat who hasn't been the same since her big brother died a year ago and doesn't feel like she fits in anymore with her friends that all changes when she meets Luke who is every different from everyone with his tattoo glory she is immediately drawn to him but knows its wrong to do that to her boyfriend Derek but will she risk all that for him and to feel normal again will she control these feelings of hers or give in to temptation
The book is called apparent attraction by uniqueread please read it and if you like it tell your friends and everyone
4 Answers
- 7 years ago
There are loads of mistakes and you are probably going to take me pointing them out as an insult and get all offended and butt hurt but I really couldn't care less because you ask for my opinion and I am going to try and help you out by pointing them out. Okay? Let's go.
You change your tense a lot. It goes from past to present very easily. Try and pick a tense and stick to it.
You don't always start a new paragraph when someone new is speaking.
There are plenty and grammar and spelling mistakes. Too many to count.
You sometimes don't put spaces after commas. Why?
You need more verity for your sentence structures. At the moment all I can see is simple and compound. Trying using a complex sentence or a multi clause sentence.
Try and space out your paragraphs a bit more since at the moment it just looks like one big one and it's really hard to read. Especially for someone like me who can't focus on words without her glasses (which are broken at the moment)
You comma splice and you don't have commas where they are needed.
Try using CASSIE for better descriptions. (CASSIE is colour, adverbs and adjectives, senses, sentence structure, imagery and emotions.)
- ?Lv 77 years ago
Based on your question, you don't seem to know to format a sentence. You should learn the basics of writing before sticking things up on Wattpad, and spamming them on Y!A.
- 7 years ago
It puts me off when the author admits there are mistakes which they basically can't be bothered to fix.
The mistakes I found include:
- Mix of tense
- Dialogue in same paragraph as normal text
- Bad grammar
- Fragments
- Spelling mistakes
- Some dialogue hasn't even got quotation marks around it ...
- 7 years ago
Oh my goodness it is amazing!
I recommend you write more stories like these. You can join wattpad clubs so you can be in contact with more wattpad users and maybe they will read your story and you will get more readings
