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Is this an original storyline?

I like to write, mostly fiction. But I haven't been able to finish anything. So I decided to write a short fairytale. The plot is a little like this:

The kings daughter is tempted into the woods by the familiar of two dark sorcerers. This familiar directs her to a path that leads to the hunting grounds of a malevolent wandering demon. This is their plot to kill her. But the plan is sent awry when the girl offers food to the demon, befriending it. This incurs a sort of, "curse" upon the girl. A wreath of thorns is curled over her wrist, her hair turns black, and eyes orange. She runs back to the castle but is cast out an almost killed after they recognise her curse. She flees into the woods and is guided by the demon, now bound to her, to the cottage of a witch. She is raised here as an assistent to the witch until she reaches her say twenties or late teens when the king orders an inquisition to kill those who are considered "evil". She then comes upon the sight of her surrogate witch-mother being burned at the stake and swears vengence. Her quest is a rudimentry, "the king is bad so i must kill him" not very original. Anyway the creatures of darkness find her as a sort of pioneer in their quest for equality and she is known as "child of the thorns" because of the thorns on her wrist. She kills the king who turns out to be her dad and the last line she says to him is somthing like "you may be my father, but you were never my king."

So, is it too basic or uncreative?

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  • 6 years ago

    I like it and I have my little fairy tale obsession. It might be similar to other things, but all it needs is its own twist. I think it might have that. That being said, it got me really intrigued and I hope you write it ^_^ . I also am a believer that nothing's really 100% original and that everything is just a circulation of slightly different ideas. Still, I think yours has its own twist and is at least original enough. I can't think of anything specific to say "It's just like that." If it's similar to something, I'd call it more of a blending of several different concepts with a twist unique to the writer.

  • 6 years ago

    Why would the child of royalty be out without a guard?

    The area around a castle is filled with the rest of the town, any woods would be way back away from the farm fields and settled areas. Castles didn't look like the Hollywood version, the lands around were all supporting the people who lived in the area.

  • Davirk
    Lv 6
    6 years ago

    It's kind of basic, yeah, but there doesn't seem to be any sort of glaring problems with it. It's the sort of thing you could improve with some work, not the kind of thing that you're going to be bashing your head in over in a couple years.

  • David
    Lv 7
    6 years ago

    If it's something you want to write then write it. You don't need feedback or opinions.

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  • 6 years ago

    Why do the sorcerers want to kill her? Why doesn't she remember that the king is her father?I think you should work at developing the story if it interests you.

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