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Is this too dramatic or just fine?

“Sammy, please" Allie pleaded. “I can explain…”

But I didn’t listen to her. What was there to explain? I had seen the whole thing happen right before my very eyes. It was time to walk away and never look back at the girl I gave my heart to. She gave it back to me with a bloody knife stuck in it.

I'm writing a story about childhood friends/sweethearts (six friends who pair off) who drift apart, then find each other again after sometime.

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  • kay
    4 years ago

    I think what you have is just fine. If the characters have indeed been friends for a long time a strong reaction is definitely warranted.

  • Diane
    Lv 4
    4 years ago

    I want to smack the narrator upside his head so, yes, I think it is a bit dramatic for my taste..

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