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Is this paragraph grammatically correct? If not, please correct me plz?
Dear Sirs,
I am a very motivated person who likes to work hard and is exceptional at working to tight deadlines.
I am a confident person who communicates effectively and works in a very organized fashion.
I am seeking a new challenging position and I am very interested in the freelance that you have interested in working for your company. I am available for an interview at short notice.
I have attached to my curriculum vitae and I am looking forward to speak with you about this opportunity, and my goal is a freelance.
Thank you for your consideration.
Kind regards,
Elio Haddad
1 Answer
- Lord BaconLv 72 years agoFavorite Answer
I shall deal only with the grammar. Something can be grammatically correct but still not actually make sense.
Paragraphs 1, 2, 4 and 5 are *grammatically* correct. That does not mean they are good.
Paragraph 3 is not grammatically correct and it does not make sense. The offending sentence is, "I am seeking a new challenging position and I am very interested in the freelance that you have interested in working for your company." It is not clear what you are trying to say so I cannot suggest a correction. A *possible* alternative may be, "I am seeking a new, challenging position and I am very interested in working for your company in a freelance capacity". Whether that makes sense in the context, I do not know as we do not know whether the application is a response to an advertised position or whether it is speculative.
OK, sorry, I must break my word and express an opinion about the proposed message. It does not demonstrate your claimed communication skills. This is not a letter that would yield good results. It is not my place to tell you what to write or how to write it but I strongly suggest you rewrite the entire letter, after studying how to write an application letter.
