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Anonymous asked in Arts & HumanitiesBooks & Authors · 5 days ago

How would you describe this fin better for my book ?

A character's secret daughter from his private family has a tail deformity from a rogue shark attack, and I'm having trouble describing it better

Here's what I have: 

Rio spotted her baby's father, about to go over to the light-skinned African American she stopped when she saw a magenta tailed mermaid with black hair carrying a six-year-old mer-girl whom Rio thought was too old to be held until the mermaid sat the young girl down and the blonde saw the young girl only had one tailfin 

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  • Anonymous
    4 days ago

    Ignore what others think

    I think what you wrote is fine 

    Source(s): HCG the xexrvijn
  • Anonymous
    5 days ago

    Can u haz punctuation?

  • Anonymous
    5 days ago

    Anyone who values his or her time would stop reading at the first comma. Why don't you cram a few more adjectives in there?

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