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My dog has been stung or bitten by an insect on two of her paws. Now she is licking and chewing at the bites. How can I make her more comfortable till she can get to the vet tomorrow. Its not fleas or ticks due to she has monthly treatments and regular grooming. I worry it might be spiders.

This needs work I know but my head is having blockage issues and I was hoping you all could kick me around little and help me get the blood flowing again...thank you

Where have you gone my lovely one?

Why have you faded from my sight?

Leaving me a shattered broken one

Alone to wander empty nights.

Where have you gone my lovely one?

A memory on the wayward winds.

Lost to me like a fading sun.

Gasp, my hearts fire wanes and dims.

Where have you gone my lovely one?

You were the smile on my lips.

The prize I thought I had won.

I still taste your sweetened kiss.

Oh! Where have you gone my lost and lovely one?

so i dusted off a poem of mine and tweaked it a bit i am hoping for some feedback on where i need to adjust it more. thank you all for your feedback it helps make a poet.

Mines

Staring forth into the blood mist

Dreaming of home and happiness

when I hear a familar click

Many men do not live to tell

stories of these fields hidden so well

those damn korean traps

call us mice for they are the cats

light faint bangs and loud deep booms

tell me of others who have met my same doom

gently, I seal my fate

lifting my foot a moment too late

No man has lived to tell

the story of this field hidden so well

thank you all once again

a poem for you all to help me polish thank you for all your help

eyes of beauty

crystal green seas

a soul so free

such was hers

brown waves of hair

frame a face fair

deserving stares

such was hers

a bed so empty

love a rarity

male friends plenty

such was hers

An autumn night

Razor bright

gave up the fight

such was hers

I am working on a project and can't pick which tale to use. Your help is greatly appreciated. Thank you all.

So I found an old poem I had all but forgotten and thought I would share it with all who want to read it

Child of the poor

No one weeps

for a child of the streets

one the less not the more

no one mourns

for a child of the poor

I will weep

for a child of the streets

what is a heart for

I will mourn

for a child of the poor

Thank you all

remember feedback is a gift and I love presents.

this is re-posting of my new poem since my phone messed up and posted in wrong category. please critic this and give me any feedback so i can polish this a up. thank you

A lost knight of the round

led to where his story's found

twilight traversed through the bog

stepping forth from mist and fog

Lhiannan Shee came with a song

her eyes a glow and nails so long

Sir Thomas did not shy away

he begged of her a moment, stay

The fairy maiden did not quiver

Prepared her words of gilded silver

Stayed herself to stare him down

Spoke with her fang filled frown

A challenge for you sir, I request

give to me your utmost best

True love, tell me all of it

or your life shall become forfeit

I tell you of honeysuckle dews

Voices rising from the pews

Love pure as crystal angel tears

your challenge has been met my dear

True love is not an earthly ware

even fairies are blessed in his care

not traded,bought, or sold

gods love is more valuable than gold

At last his words were spoken

the fairies wings fell limp and broken

Lhiannan Shee smiled his way

her curse was lifted on this day

Grateful for the knight's true heart

Her life has a fresh new start

now a simple humble lass

her sins forgiven lost to the past

this is a new poem and I could use some feedback to improve and polish it. All feedback is appreciated thank you

A lost knight of the round

led to where his storys found

twilight traversed through the bog

stepping forth from mist and fog

Lhiannan Shee came with a song

her eyes a glow and nails so long

Sir Thomas did not shy away

he begged of her a moment, stay

The fairy maiden did not quiver

Prepared her words of gilded silver

Stayed herself to stare him down

Spoke with her fang filled frown

A challenge for you sir, I request

give to me your upmost best

True love, tell me all of it

or your life shall become forfeit

I tell you of honeysuckle dews

Voices rising from the pews

Love pure as crystal angel tears

your challenge has been met my dear

True love is not an earthly ware

even fairies are blessed in his care

not traded,bought, or sold

gods love is more valuable than gold

At last his words were spoken

the fairies wings fell limp and broken

Lhiannan Shee smiled his way

her curse was lifted on this day

Greatful for the knight's true heart

Her life has a fresh new start

now a simple humble lass

her sins forgiven lost to the past

Thank you all

So recently it was brought to my attention that I should try something with a little more structure. So I have attempted to flex my brain and try a new poem. All feedback is great this is still in rough draft form. Thank you all

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I reside in pain

trapped by agony

painted walls so plain

lost life's symphony

Darkness, light, darkness

nights to days melding

time rules loneliness

death so compelling

Come to me o' death

stop my straining heart

kiss away ragged breaths

from life I depart

Thank you all again.

Normally I write darker stuff but gave it try with a lighter poem. What do you all think?

The looking glass

Beyond the looking glass

a world of silver and gold

where unicorns graze on dew kissed grass

no anger or fear to behold

no mortal soul may pass

beyond my looking glass

Beyond the looking glass

A world of colorful dreams

where willow trees sing to all that pass

and fairies dance on bright moonbeams

no mortal soul may pass

beyond my looking glass

Beyond the looking glass

a world where only dreamers go

Where logic lives amongst the past

and I chanced to enter long ago

My mortal soul has passed

beyond my looking glass

Once again I am reaching out for feedback. I love all the tips you all give me it helps me be a better poet. Please read enjoy and let me know what you think

BEYOND THE GRAVE

When death shall materialize

doning a whimsical face

from the grave I shall rise

to sheild against the cold embrace

Dare not stare into dark blank eyes

they suck souls in to bind them tight

feeding minds poisonous lies

beware this creature of the night

My soul you will surely recognize

though my shape shall differ to your sight

your voice will scream terror filled cries

for I am a dreaded creature of the night

Lock your doors and bolt them tight

Beware all creatures of the night

Once again thank you all for any feedback

All feedback welcomed. Thank you all.

LADY'S MAN

Her angel features and virgin eyes

glow in the candle light

and for these reasons he tries

to woe her to his bed tonight

naively she follows him

to his chamber suite

and all the candles dim

for his plan is complete

as fangs glisten in the moonlight

a silent scream whimpers in defeat

growling, she takes her first bite

spilling his blood on the silk sheets

I wrote this poem awhile ago and never really looked back at it. critism is a gift so please give me you opinions or tips. Is it worth my time to revisit it?

THE CALL

What has become of us?

We who were the night.

No longer do we prowl.

Have we given up the fight?

Once we fed off innocents,

and bathed in their blood.

Now we hide from the living,

and shun what we have become.

Time does not touch our skin.

Death fears our glance.

Life withers in our grip.

Yet we hide amongst the past.

I rose to fufill my name

as the first of us all.

Rise up from your graves

and answer to my call.

No longer shall we hide

Once again we shall be the night.

Among the living we shall prowl,

and all will fear

the Vampire bite.

Your feedback is appreciated

Heaven is waiting

so she takes the pills

its death she's been dating

and for which she gave her will

in her warm safe bed

she curls up to wait

by morning she'll be dead

because now decides her fate

but before from this world she departs

she wishes a fond farewell

To a future in which she might have played a part

yet for every heaven there is a hell

Once again thank you all

I am getting sores on the bridge of my nose from my CPAP I was wondering if anyone had any tips. I can't afford a gel pad yet and am not sure I want waste the money if it doesn't work. Thank you

I have had my dog to vet and they found no reason for it but my dog pukes alot. Not just occasionally but every day. Tonight 4 times. She is drinking fine and is a good weight. This has been going on for a year now. We have tried soft and dry foods every thing from iams to cheap food with no luck I have tried limiting how much she eats as well. Any recommendations I feel so bad for my baby

She will go as far as pulling it out of our laundry baskets. I have tried redirecting her with heathly chew toys and treats. I have tried putting dirty laundry out of reach but am unable to train husband to put his dirty clothes in hamper. I figure dog is easier to train. Any tips on how to train dog and why she does this.

I am looking to buy a home and have found a great property with a modular home tied down to a solid foundation but i can't seem to find any info on if they are allowed.

i have a push briggs and stratton lawn mower. the arm no longer pulls the cable is it possible to bypass this? how do i fix if not? help the lawn is half mowed.

will be traveling to amarillo in October and would like a good recommendation on where to stay. Don't want to spend a fortune either. a good hotel for a fair price.