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Ive been writing dark/gloomy poems for awhile, it would be nice if someone could give me some opinions on my poem :)

This one is about this really nice girl who i really liked and got along with, but when things started to go sour for me (very sour) we sorta drifted apart and i found it kinda hard, anyways here it is:

From feelings of serenity

From feelings of perfection

From feelings of admiration

From feelings of warmth

From feelings of happiness

From feelings of attatchment

To feelings of contempt

I seek for you

In your warm sea

Instead Ive found darkness

As heavy waves engulf me

And leave me in sorrow

I long for you my love

Beyond your sea i fall

Into my abyss of slag

I long for your horizon

From feelings of desolation

Ive been righting for a couple of months and need someone to read this poem and tell me what they think.

P.s no stupid bullsh!t, thanks

From feelings of serenity

From feelings of perfection

From feelings of admiration

From feelings of warmth

From feelings of happiness

From feelings of attatchment

To feelings of contempt

I seek for you

Im at a distance

Instead Ive found darkness

Deep embedded in thought

I long for you my love

Beyond your sea i fall

Into my abyss of sludge

I long for your horizon

From feelings of desolation

Ok long story short, i have no onye to read this for me and, so it'd be nice to receive some feed-back p.s. no stupid bullsh!t please

Theres something pulling on my face

Pulling Towards the floor

i can feel it

It makes everything thing worse,

Its affecting my face, almost killing it.

It makes my eyes sting

It makes me fear for the future

It makes everything harder

Unfortunate souls have been forsaken

Theres no release

There's no saviour

Theres no escape

Only black skies and molten ground

Was this inevitable?

My mind becomes a fatal wreck as i claw away at my arms

Once more i reach for the light

But darkness has taken it away

Ive been writing dark poetry/monlogues for awhile now but ive never had anyone tell me what they think of them, could you please take some time reading this, it didnt take me long to, just your opinions please, thanks (p.s. no bullsh!t too please)

As we stare into our futures, (which defines the term "human"),

we cant help but always hope for the best, somehow we misjudge the size of the silver lined cloud. Ahhh the cloud of ignorance as i like to call it,

this cloud is deceitful, it takes human emotions, and when the time comes it crushes them.

But what if the silver lining doesnt exist for an individual,

an individual who has nothing and never will (emotionally), and yet he or she still yearns for another's affection and grace, and gets nothing due to broken mentality.

all that is left is agonisingly empty feeling from deep inside the soul.

A crippling pain which drifts an individual deeper and deeper in to the darkness until there is no release and eternal sleep is the only saviour.

And when darkness consumes my ignorant cloud ..... Nightmares dominate forever.

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