Zala P.

In a sense: "if the past action happened, have you done this?"

please help me fix it if it's wrong

Whenever I try to connect to tumblr.com "This web page is not available" notice loads. I cleared up my browsing history, cache etc. and disabled all extensions. When that didn't do anything I switched back to the default browser settings and cleared up all internet-related data on my disk - again nothing. I switched to other browsers like Firefox and Explorer and the same problem appears. Every other site works and loads quickly but polyvore.com and tumblr.com won't. I physically re-set router and then made sure I wasn't logged-in from a different device like my phone or whatever but it's all the same.

It's frustrating! Why Chrome refuses to load specific sites for no reason? isitdownforeveryone.com shows that these 2 sites AREN'T down for anyone. HOWEVER using proxy I can still asses these sites but without having all options available (e.g. saving drafts). So that doesn't help either.

Anne moans before she can help it, a low guttural sound disengaging itself from her throat.

Should "itself" stay in the sentence or be taken out?

He realises that his REGRET FOR HIS INSTINCTIVE MOVE is probably written all over his face.

Is there a better (style-wise) option to use the part in capital letters in a sentence? Context: a man accidentally saves his enemy from falling over a ledge.

Is there a better (style-wise) option to use the part in capital letters in a sentence?

Context: a man accidentally saves his enemy from falling over a ledge.

Can you make this sentence sound less awkward or is it OK?

My Tumblr queue is acting strange when I try to organise scheduled posts.

1. It doesn't respond to Mouse Click + PgUp/PgDn/Home/End combination to 'drag' posts anymore.

2. When I try to 'drag' a post to place it before another one, it either won't let me or the post disappears completely. Only black background is shown, like a gap between the rest of the queued posts.

I already uninstalled Tumblr Savior and Missing E but no luck so far.

I …” starts Jack unsurely when Sally keeps standing silently between the front door.

'between the front door" sounds terribly awkward.

Which one is correct in this context? :

Heavy rain from hours ago is now no more than a drizzle, damping Monica���s curls but not sticking them to her temples like Anne's wet strands do.

A two-minute walk from the park to Monica’s house *couldn’t be* the reason for Anne’s wet coat and cold hands. Standing at the doorstep for 20 minutes and contemplating if she should ring the doorbell or flee the country *could be*.

You can fix anything else if you find it. Thanks!

She follows his motion, seemingly only then becoming aware of the heavy object in her hands.

Is the "seemingly only then becoming aware" part weird?

(The context is that the woman has a hevy box in her arms and when she talks to someone, she forgets about it. The guy triest to take it from her hands and she is "reminded" of it.)

Although Mum forgave him already, Harry’s mood is still wavering between relief and sulking as it’s fitting to his age.

It's the "as it's fitting to his age" part that is bothering me.

The context is something about a teen and his troubles or whatever ...

Harry knows that the grown-ups are right when they say that Harry needs to get himself together and pick up the slack when it comes to schoolwork but quietly, he doesn’t understand how is he to blame.

Maybe break it in two? Quietly=secretly is there a better word/expression for it.

Just do whatever you think would improve the sentence.

If you sit on a couch and crawl "down" from it, do you crawl on the floor or to the floor? Or something else entirely?

The context: (Charles stops in the middle of releasing an indignant puffing sound and suck his bottom lip between his teeth.)

He straightens up on the couch, his eyes slowly finding the forgotten book in his lap, which of course fell closed during his reverie.

You wash the dishes but clean your teeth ... What about a staircase?

Use another verb if it's more appropriate, please. :)

I mean the position of someone's arm covering their eyes (as if they were trying to escape the morning light coming through the blinds or sth!).

Like this, basically (but the guy in the pic isn't completely covering his eyes)

http://i.livescience.com/images/i/000/004/212/iFF/...

He removes it from his finger and places it into his open palm.

Is it into or onto someone's palm?

How do you say an "open palm". (I mean the shape of the hand where it looks like you are showing somebody number 5 - with fanning your fingers out.)

Should it be a clear/unclosed/open/XY palm? What is the right phrase?

They put their dripping umbrellas in the umbrella stand in a corner and gratefully accepted Father Michael’ hot coffee.

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Anything that needs to be fixed: the repetition, awkward wording ...