Baritones and Bourbon?

Just wondering what you think.

I dreamt of you last night,
Baritones and bourbon.
I could smell your skin
smooth beneath my hand.
Blood surges forward racing to reach you…
I woke alone.

2008-02-20T10:35:17Z

I tried to find a descriptive way to write how your pusle pounds when you come out of an intense dream. I couldn't find anything that seemed right.

Anonymous2008-02-20T09:49:49Z

Favorite Answer

This is cool. It sounds a little random, the first round...but, as you slowly sip away, the true flavors comes through
...ahhhh...TD

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Lady Annabella-VInylist2008-02-20T09:48:15Z

I like it! Good title too, as well as the last line. If you allow me, I am less convinced by "Blood surges forward...", which I find a bit clichéd.

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