As the leaves fall
so does my mood
seasonally affected
like a leafless gloom
sunlight disappearing
from shortened days
as I chase these moods
from a cloudy haze
I'd like to dis-order
these seasonal ways
and bring the sunshine
back to my days
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i liked this 5 hours ago. i hope yahoo fixes these glitches. hi shirleyf.
i don't really miss summer, but would like to drag out autumn as long as possible.
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I love the fall and winter! It's so beautiful, as long as the roads are nice of course. I like your poem, its very clear and well written. There are probably a few words or phrases you could leave out to bring more clarity.
"Seasonally affected
Like a leafless gloom" Is, in my opinion, the most potent line.
Be sure to keep revising and editing. I'd suggest putting it away for a while and then pull it back out.
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Back to my days
That bring the sunshine
These seasonal ways
I'd never disorder
from a cloud-puffed haze
As I chase my moods
Away shortening days
Sunlight disappearing
That leafless gloom
Seasons unaffected
Nor is my mood;
As the leaves fall...
Caz :) x
No yes no yes well sometimes , Autumn Gold when I'm wandering as lonely as a cloud through this life and past the growing seeds of Spring and now the Golden lives of evergreen the swinging gates
that lead to stony lanes ...and there the Daffodil's did Dance on nimble feet.. and the warmth of the Spring Cuckoo sings ...
my answer to your poetry that is lovely .. your good thanks
This is a new poem that I'm working on now .. I Can't get it right ( Hugss)
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I think everyone does to an extent.
when I lived up North in Prince George, Anahim Lake and Kamloops I was finally told that was my problem, I was extrememly anemic as well. My thyroid off the charts at times and still... my SAD is not as BAD in Alabama
I do like your poem but the colorful trees in all their glorious array are a bit of heaven to my tired soul