....Feedback, anyone?

Bacteria gnawing on tissue exhale
Filling my skull with pink helium
Skin is unfurling and eyes are billowing
Toes numb as my roots release

Oxygen is filling my lungs with oil
To meet the water in my veins
Breath snagging as I part with my shadow
I giggle as he waves goodbye

Tunneling vision is pixellating
With starbursts of fire and ice
Limbs become lost in a haystack of needles
And limply I drift with the clouds..

Far, far beyond the vanilla cloud castles
I'm lost in the velvet black folds
My bones are bending --I don't feel a thing!
--And, laughing I swallow a star

Fracturing shockwave of light changes the
Marrow of bone into sand
Crumbling, my purpose slips out as a whisper:
"To dwell between negative spaces"

?2011-12-01T18:14:42Z

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Interesting concept of passing on! I like it...but it takes a couple of readings to fully realize. Thank you for sharing this good read with us.

?2011-12-02T02:34:19Z

Gripping and graphic and novel throughout and
a little scary indeed!
:)