a poem by ME!.......let me know your thoughts after reading it..thank you...~~?

It shows promise. I like the imagery but I feel that the use of rhyming couplets lets it down a little, makes it feel too simplistic. If the pattern of the rhymes was alternated in some way so that the reader's mind is less focused on the rhyming and more on the imagery, it would become much stronger in its effect.

Hazel raised the question of stealing from the internet: If you put anything else on the web, mail a copy to yourself in a sealed envelope. When it arrives, don't open it, put it someplace safe; then it can be presented in a court of law as legal proof of your authorship and that you own the copyright to it.

I'm picky when it comes to songs and poems.It was ok.I like the concept of appreciating the small things in life, I just felt it lacked something.I feel you could have been more creative with it.A few metaphores and similes would have been nice.You should also learn new words.The more words you know,the more complex rhymes you'll find. Ryming Trees,knees and these are pretty cliche'

Read more poems.Learn a few things from the pros.By all means,keep writing.You're on to something.

I hope it wasn't too harsh.I'm just giving my honest opinion.

You have captured a thought, feeling, and an image. Reminds me a little of Robert Frost taking a walk to feed the calf.

I am not trying to be rude but you should not post poetry or other works of yours on the Internet. Anybody could see them, steal them, and publish them under their own name, unless yours is already published or something.

yes it was really gud. u hav a gud talent.not eveyrone will hav that talent u hav it thats really nice keep it up.try to write some more poem like this. all the best for ur future!!!!!

Pretty good. Keep writing.

nice job, you are quite talented. I think your style is a little rough, but that is just my opinion. I really did enjoy your poem. PLEASE, PLEASE keep writing you have talent.

it was good so keep it up