What does everyone think of this?

Great idea for a children's book!

The writing is very good.

I have some doubts on the subject. How did it come to you? There is a thing called automatic writing, when a person writes without any specific intention and something comes out of it. Many would argue it's the subconscious that's at work, but others think it's a demonic activity and I'm inclined to believe the second category. Why would your subconscious want the demons to kill any living being on earth? This is what the demons would love to do.

I suggest, if you like to write, not to let your inspiration wander, but refer to your own experience.

Also, I would recommend you to refer to a priest for spiritual advice.

Not much of a story....more like a paragraph from a story. Sounds a bit like any other horror "story". But I will say something positive....I liked the "rusty' bloodstained scythes."

A bit dark but the writing was quite good. You need to break it up into stanzas and paragraphs. It makes it easier to read. Try and expand your use of descriptive adjectives and similes, using the phrase, "like a". EG: surfaced from their confinement like a fetid ooze, spewing forth from the Earth. If you are quite young it is very good because a lot of young people can barely read or write. I like writing and the use of words is fascinating to me. Check out my TITANIC STORY on http://jules-shortstories.blogspot.com./ This was my first attempt at writing, tell me what you think. Jules, Australia.

http://jules-shortstories.blogspot.com/

I think this is the coolest thing ever. and by cool I mean psycho.

Dammit! Now I have to go to sleep with that on my head. Thanks for scaring the crap out of me before bedtime!

pretty good!, & that means a lot from me b/c i'm a tough grader

Hmmm war :(

you need some mental help