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Lyn I
Lv 5
Lyn I asked in Entertainment & MusicMusic · 1 decade ago

I wrote a song based on a letter that tears on ur pillow wrote. what do you think? Its a first for me. lol?

I watched you walk out of my world

you were on your own track

there was no turning back

no hope left inside as our friendship died

CHORUS

Oh babe I'm missing you, please tell me how to mend the fragments of our broken dreams

What more could I say that would make you stay forever and always.

I said the wrong thing

My words left their sting

An aching pain in your heart

Can it ever be healed

I know its broken and torn apart

CHORUS

If you were back in my world

I would tell you the things

you most wanted to hear

I would dry those tears

and calm those fears in your heart

CHOURUS

How can you say just walk away

People who are not friends don't talk

So please tell me then

How do we mend

Our friendship once so true

Show me the right track back to you

CHORUS

You were my Angel

With the blue sparkling eyes

You will be my Angel

Till stars no longer shine

I'le walk the long and lonley track the track with no end untill I'm once again with you my Angel my frien

Update:

I wrote the song for some one on here who asked for a song based on the letter she posted earlier, I have emailed it to her as it is, I am waiting for my neice or son to add the music as they can do that. I don't know my doh from my fah lol. thanks for all your kind comments. x

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  • 1 decade ago
    Favorite Answer

    its really good but be careful about posting your work on the internet people might steal it and say it was theirs

  • ?
    Lv 4
    5 years ago

    In medical school they had to take notes really fast. Becoming a doctor is not that easy now, The speed of their writing messep up their handwriting And they don't care about it after becoming a doctor.

  • It's good but I think you have the chorus too many times, it will drag out the song. Trust me as a singer it will be boring and i wont want to sing it. but very good! i like it alot; i think it fits alot of people's lives (mine included...)

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Well, until there is a melody to go along with it, it isn't a song, its a poem. It's okay though.

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  • sweets
    Lv 6
    1 decade ago

    I like it.

    Wish I could hear it with the music!

    Best of luck to ya!

    I wish I could write songs. . .

  • 1 decade ago

    very nice, good job.

    on a constructive note, it may be a little long with a bit much chorus, but it's yours so go with how it feels.

    What chords you using?

  • 1 decade ago

    Cute.

  • 1 decade ago

    Great song.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    It's good but a little typical.

  • 1 decade ago

    Watch out, not bad, not at all. Good stuff.

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