well to all of u what u think of this one (poem)?

It's not bad but I have a bit of constructive criticism ;) First of all, poetry is meant to be read out loud. It should have a fairly steady beat. Yours does until around the line "looks like a small ice cube" the other thing is it is a bit awkward to read because of the difference in syllables in different line. The number of syllables in each line should be fairly similar. Overall, it is a good poem, and can easily be improved by some rewording and revision =)

Honestly, i dont like much poetry so i would say its cool cause i dont want to make you feel bad. check it out, do me a favor and if it works i can say i know a famous poet. your poetry passion is evident. dont think about a poem. try wrighting down whats in your head before you think about it. example, the first few minutes you awake you can remember specifics about a dream you just had. you take a ****, whip your *** and whala! you cant remember ****. if before you think about anything you reach over to a pad and pen you have ready for just this thing and wright key words that will trigger your memory later. these visions are so vital, i am thinking we will all be poetry lovers one day. same with those stupid thoughts we call day dreams. before you disregard them as that "day dream" jot down a few key factors to look at later and refresh your memory on what you were thinking about. they are tomorrow's yesterday's just a little in advance.

I hate to be the bearer of bad news, but it has no meaning, no flow, no rhythm and your choice of words are silly and juvenile. And the word is spelled popped. Pax - C.

um--interesting....