Is this a good introduction to an essay?

agreed- great way to start. beginning with a quote is a good idea. here are some errors that need fixing, though:

**when you are talking about the speech belonging to Marting Luther King, it is possessive, so there needs to be an apostrophe after the "g" in King and before the "s" in Kings. It will then look like this: "This was just a brief yet powerful quote from Martin Luther King's........" Same thing when you are talking about his way of addressing... it's his, so it is possessive. "The I have a dream speech was Martin Luther King's way of addressing..." and one more near the end...

"...part of Martin Luther King's thirty-nine years..."

*and take out "what" after addressing.

*if "I Have a Dream" is a title, capitalize it like so.

"The I have a dream speech was Martin Luther King's way of addressing..."

*try changing "...hope TO and brand new day..." to "...hope FOR a brand new day..." try both of them and read the sentence out loud. see which one sounds better.

*and i am not sure exactly what is going on at the end of this sentence: "...proud to say that this part of Martin Luther Kings thirty-nine years has came too past."

-what thirty-nine years (good job writing that number out, by the way) are are you talking about?

- are you trying to say, "...has come to pass."?

- or are you trying to say, "...thirty-nine years came too fast?"

hope these suggestions help. GOOD LUCK on whatever you are writing for.

Here's an idea: Mixed-sexes at school cause a number of problems: jealousy, competition for attention, premature sexual activities, daydreaming, distractions, beauty competitions, self-image hangups, and (fill in the blanks), to name but a few. Even though same-sex schools have a few similar or opposite downfalls, the education level achieved by a same-sex facility overcompensates these faults. I will prove that the concentration and, ergo, scholarly outcomes achieved at a same-sex school are much higher than a normal mixed school. With facts taken from the National Bereau of Statistics (or whatever it is called there) I will prove, without a shadow of a doubt, that having an All-Boys or an All-Girls secondary college will greatly increase the intelligence of our population. Then go on to talk about how many homosexuals are formed at these types of schools compared to the supressed ones from mixed schooling....LOL Tough case to argue!

Very nice job here with this essay - however, it does need editing or you will otherwise lose points needlessly. Some I see are as follows:

*possession (Martin Luther King's speech, etc.)

*always capitalize Black as it references an ethnicity, such as Caucasian or Hispanic, etc.

*capitalize titles and either underline them or put them in italics but do not use quotation marks (those are for quotes)

Needs some serious editing, but has great potential.

umm, couple gramatical errors, but I love it. Very captivating.