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Could a native English speaker correct the mistakes in this text and make it sound better?Thanks in advance.?
According to historians, one of the greatest civilizations of the human history was created in Çatalhöyük,Anatolia. Those who created this civilization are counted to be the first farmers in the history. Those people discovered how to feed themselves with the plants they grew and the animals they domesticated. They were also the first to establish the modern family and the urban system. Here came up the worshipping, Mother Goddess and the Goddess of Abundance(a tanslation from Turkish just word by word… I am lost here), named Cybele and Artemis respectively. Those people were also the first to engrave the walls of their houses with wall pictures presumably as beautiful as works of art.
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- Anonymous1 decade agoFavorite Answer
According to historians, one of the greatest civilizations in human history was that of the Catalhoyuk people of Anatolia in Turkey. This group of civilization are acknowledged to be the first farmers in our world. These people discovered how to feed themselves from the plants they grew and through the animals they learned how to domesticate. They were also the first to establish the systems of what we recognize today as, the family unit and urban organization. It was here, that arose the worship of the Mother Goddess and the God of Abundance, as defined from Turkish translation, and known as Cybele and Artemis, respectively. These people were also the first to engrave on the walls of their homes, pictures, as beautiful as any work of art.
- poisonedpirateLv 51 decade ago
The creators of this civilization are counted to be the first farmers in the history.
These people discovered how to feed themselves with the plants that they grew and the animals that they domesticated.
It was the beginning of worshipping, Mother Goddess and the Goddess of Abundance(a tanslation from Turkish just word by word… I am lost here), named Cybele and Artemis respectively.
These people were also the first to engrave the walls of their houses with wall pictures, presumably as beautiful as works of art.
Hope this helps you - good luck!
- YaybobLv 71 decade ago
Your version is very good for a non-native speaker, better than many native English speakers could write. Your use of verb tenses is excellent.
According to historians, one of the greatest civilizations IN human history FLOURISHED in Ãatalhöyük, Anatolia. THE ANATOLIANS OF ÃATALHöYüK are CONSIDERED TO BE the first farmers in the history. THEY LEARNED to feed themselves BY FARMING and DOMESTICATING animals.
They were also the first to establish the modern family and urban system. THEY WORSHIPPED THE mother goddess Cybele and the goddess of abundance Artemis. THEY were also the first to engrave the walls of their houses with IMAGES, presumably as art.
