How do you feel about this?

your poem is beautiful.

you got talent girl, you

can put this one in the contest and win.

love your work you are

a natural.

god bless

laney

I do like your poem, I think you need to change it slightly only because some of it is rhyming and some isn't. I think if you spend a little more time on it and make the rhyming consistent it will make your poem even better.

As you read it just make sure it bounces along at the same tempo if you get my meaning. It makes a poem easier to read in my opinion.

Great content and theme, with a little more work, this poem has real potential.

This is only my opinion and of course you might love it just the way it is, which is great. I also write poetry and often the only person it makes sense to is me. I like to share it to get other peoples opinions, sometimes I take into consideration their comments and make changes if I think it will improve it, and other times I think it is perfect just the way it is.

Keep writing.

I love the tone of your poem. I like the rhythme of the poem. I like the metaphors in the poem. You are really good I think. U have a future as a poet.

you have a talent for writting. it is a good poem. entertaining and classy. just curious about the second line... is lays the proper form of the word to use there cuzi am not sure.. submit more like this i really liked it

I really like this piece. Have you written anything else?? I would really like to see others if you have any. Well done.

You have a strong talent with words, keep it up.

I think it's pretty good, interesting.

Nice work:)

ummm confused......

idk