poem.. tell me what you think?

so here goes just let me know if you dont like it\\

the endless drone of precipitation

against the translucent pains of glass

time has worn in expectation

pits and valleys have come to pass

i find a way to see myself there

amidst the many distant shores

in a fictitious world that id created

each hue outlines what was not pure

i found a place for us to hide there,

a mask to veil your guile and grief

for everything we just encountered

as miserable as it was brief

i only hope your dreams are simple

and you amuse easily at this site

for twilights falling in the abbey

and weve just one chance to get it right

thanks theres 30 seconds youll never get back hope it was worth it....