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Forced Over

In my darkest place, where no one goes
The seed of doubt steadily grows
Though years repressed, kept out of sight
It grows in malice and in might
The likes of which I cannot fight
Behind the curtain hides a case
The contents which I cannot face
A cancer spreading through my veins
A hatred that I can't contain
This hatred fills my heart with pain
If only I could face this fear
Stop drowning it in wine and beer
While feeding it, to bring it near
So hallow eyes will be made clear
And I will have succumb to fear

lalalandliss · Accepted Answer

wow that's good... a little more morbid than I usually like but verrrrrrrrryyyyy well written!!! :D
I like how it rhymes pretty much perfectly and it has a great rhythm and flow

Misty R · Answer

Wonderful!!! Excellent!!! LOVE IT!!!Keep on writing!!

Anonymous · Answer

That's really really good!!
So meaningful and deep. Keep up the great work! -=D

jo · Answer

can feel the pain and fear for the person in your words 

hope its just word and not true of you or someone you know xxx

ishani · Answer

its really wonderfull how you can express everything so perfectly....
i loved it....
 
i would rate it 9.5/10 .....
0.5 deducted cuz i feel that the title is somewhat inappropiate.....i don't know whats wrong exactly but aftre reading your poem i felt that the title was kinda dull,dumb and 'not-okay'.

anyway... keep writing  :)

Anonymous · Answer

I like it mostly the middle and end

not in use · Answer

That's amazing.

'nuff said.

Anonymous · Answer

really wonderful, keep up the good work!!

Anonymous · Answer

Brilliant.

Thank you for sharing.

Anonymous · Answer

Awesome, that is really good!

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