Please critique?

tortured soul- tell me something else, give me an example don't let me figure it out, give me a noun!!!

i refer the word bubbly to things like liquid and witches cauldron , the word is distracting, try changing it but keep the feel.

i see love, hate, you state several subjects, comparative analysis of ??

brokenhearted, being lead on by someone you trusted, living in a fake world.

Finish this into the lyrics to the song it wants to be!!!! :)

over all not my style. but it is desent. . the only critique that I have is you go from "where no one hates and no one fights" then go right to Its "disturbing how reckless one can become" it seems to me a little contraditory to the setting your trying to imply. just my interpretation. I may have it wrong

Nice, and true everyone loves a love song

It's good - it conveys emotion and point well

But for the fifth line, use "and" instead of "&" for grammatical reasons

pretty good, uh I hope you know that some people will go to any length to earn money so great way of showing your work to some criminal

I like it, send it in to Reader's Digest, it might get you some $$$.

not bad

I think that you have done well and it flows better reading it a second time.

Nice =]

Wow very nice!!

Did you wright that?

Good work...

not bad.. keep it up