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Tori K asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

Poem. Wrote it awhile back, whatcha think?

She feels dizzy

But no pain.

Her heart is racing.

But she can’t feel a thing.

The blood drips

From her wrists to the floor.

She begins to stumble.

You reach the door.

Walking inside.

You see her bleeding.

You want to help.

But she denies.

Saying:

Don’t save me.

I want to die.

You can’t believe

The words she just spoke.

But you walk away.

Hurt.

You return.

She’s still alive.

You could help her.

But she cries.

I still don’t want you.

I never did.

Now leave me be.

I’m better off dead.

You leave again.

Tears in your eyes.

You loved her.

And you were letting her die.

An hour later

You walk back in

She’s lying on her bed.

Eyes staring blankly..

She watches you.

You could have saved me

If you wanted to.

**I am not suicidal promise :) but it is something a write about quite alot....so whatcha think?**

Update:

:D exactly what I was goin for.

yay.

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago
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    idc what everyone else says

    you are a fkn genius this poem is beautiful how can others judge what they dont understand

  • 1 decade ago

    I love it! Although I think its rather cruel that the guy just left her to die. ):

    Amazing how you manage to incorporate perfect imagery and understanding in few words.

    And don't worry, what you write is not really who you are.

    Keep writing!

    And if you have time, can you visit my question and give some feedback for this first chapter that I wrote? Thanks. (:

    http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=ApVHp...

  • it's personally not my style, but i still like it. it give me goose bumps though, so you're good on the description/describing

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    i likey well done eh 10/10

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  • 1 decade ago

    it gives me chills down my spine

  • 1 decade ago

    that is kinda freaky :/

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