Yahoo Answers is shutting down on May 4th, 2021 (Eastern Time) and beginning April 20th, 2021 (Eastern Time) the Yahoo Answers website will be in read-only mode. There will be no changes to other Yahoo properties or services, or your Yahoo account. You can find more information about the Yahoo Answers shutdown and how to download your data on this help page.

Trending News

Promoted
kissaled
Lv 5
kissaled asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

An older poem of mine, which has never been seen!! Thoughts?

Foolish.

The moon rides high,

The grass lies low,

Across the sky,

The sound not slow,

An owl does hoot,

A witch does cackle,

A spell has broken,

A man did rattle,

Foolish are you,

For listen it well,

Your life did fall,

His life he sells.

Update:

It was actually written for the intention of my first book, but never made the cut!!! but it's always held a specialplace in my heart, i was 7 when i wrote it, awh!!

9 Answers

Relevance
  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago
    Favorite Answer

    ahh thats great! i love reading your poems!!

    7 when you wrote it?!! no way!!

    ♥

  • VAndors Excelsior™ (Jeeti Johal Bhuller)™
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago

    It is excellent considering it was written by one so young...

    The world revolves as always

    And cauldrons brew and froth,

    Death by taint and tincture

    And a marring of life’s breath

    Its comes neither with a speeding

    And serves to remind all day

    Singing Gods praises gives harlots greater gain

    I attempt to refrain from devils disdain

    The cackle with glee and malice

    As pie eyed she preaches love

    For him a one who ne’er by stood

    Where others bowed their hearts.

    Much malice mirth and gloating

    As the witches viewed their works

    They reign supreme in devils den

    Where once the angels were ...

    The ne’er ending, recurring, repetitious story ..

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Very Good....wow 7 years old I didn't start writing poetry untill I was 10. Excellent job. I hope to see more.

  • The Desert Bird
    Lv 5
    1 decade ago

    It sounds great.

    To improve the rhythm I would remove the commas after "low", "slow", "rattle" and "well" and rather use a full stop.

  • How do you think about the answers? You can sign in to vote the answer.
  • demonick_chicka
    1 decade ago

    This is very nice, I like the simplicity of it and the shortness of the sentences. It's very different from my own poetry, but in a good way, it's refreshing. : )

  • DAWG
    Lv 4
    1 decade ago

    Sounds good,original and different! It's always refreshing to hear new stuff!

  • walter b
    1 decade ago

    Pretty cool. Sorta halloweeny. I like it . Keep em coming.

  • Sidney
    1 decade ago

    i like it. kind of send shivers down my spine, in a VERY good way.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    i like it, good work keep them coming

Still have questions? Get your answers by asking now.