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A poem I wrote, please; constructive criticism?
Undefined
You, reminded me the importance of my existence
The blood dripping down the walls
Everyday your face engraved in my memories
The blood signifies the pain you put me through
The silence of honesty
I cannot take the silence
The silence is hovering me
Like a dark storm cloud, hovering me
Pain, a sharp knife stabbing me in the heart
I feel no pain, I am just too numb
Dreams of the good times, I am brainwashed
You were part of me, now I choke without warning
I live a solemn face, frowns are endless
You ripped and destroyed my soul
Every breath I take is dedicated to the pain
I feel motionless, there is no feeling to be felt
I cannot bear to see happy faces
I am deprived of what you hold now
You hold a life of happiness and joy
What I hold is undefined
5 Answers
- Anonymous1 decade agoFavorite Answer
Wow. :O
- CeeCeeLv 51 decade ago
I liked it but I think that in the second verse, it should read "hovering over me" to be correct. I am pretty that hovering over is right --something can hover but I don't think hovering .
- MastermindLv 41 decade ago
It is amazing, fantastic, fantabulous, cool, tremendous, beautiful.
I thing you should submit it to a newspaper and the'll print it for you if they like it.
- 1 decade ago
i absolutley love this poem! its amazing! so touching
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