I just wrote this, need opinions..?

THAT...was GREAT. most of the time, the poetry submitted on this forum is totally puerile. But you seem to be several (read: MANY) cuts above the great unwashed...

I like your first stanza. The image of arguing and burning go together quite well. The image of fire works well to symbolize that burning people feel inside when they are angry. I'm not sure about eyes bleeding. This would seem to indicate severe physical pain where you seem to mean emotional pain. The mixed image of raindrops and fire is also confusing. The third stanza has a spelling error in that you mean "Breath" not "Breathe". Other than that, it is a bit confusing. It seems that the two people here are happy, yet they are drowning, another water image. In stanza four they seem to be apart again and the water images resurface. You also probably mean "rising" instead of "raising". I like stanza five. The image of fetters is appropriate along with the physical problems of being hard to breathe and speak. The last stanza is probably the best of all. I really like the last line because it seems to fit with all of the imagery of the rest of the poem. Anyway, that's my two cents worth. You have a lot of talent.

That was amazing! It really realtes to how I feel and lot's of others to. Although you haven't written in a while, you obviously still have your skillz. I LOVED IT! It's also in really great format and easy to read which I think helps. If you wouldn't mind you could check out some of the poems I've posted.

I GIVE IT FIVE THOUSANDS STARS

that was really good!

i found the "every time you say something, it goes in and out my ear" a bit plain, like a normal sentence. the rest was amazing though

I think it's so nice! Your very talented! I usually read poems and think they don't have any meaning but yours has a lot!

Luv it♥

Nice poem.

title: Why can't you