Story!! PLease read a brief minute! two points if you read!?

I am writing a story and I want you to tell me what you think.

Here are the characters:

Vanessa (girl) 19

Corey (boy) 17

Allison (girl) 14

Alexander (boy) 14

Elisabeth (girl) 12

Isabella (girl) 11

Jacob (boy) 9

And here the story is:

One Mistake Made, What You Pay For It

Allison sat on the bed, thinking of what she just saw. Allison was the third oldest of seven children aged from nineteen through nine. Questions swirled her mind as she thought more of it. She thought to herself why did I let this happen to me. She decided to tell her older sister Vanessa about it. Her sister would know what to do about it. She was nineteen and, out of high school, and into her first year of college. She walked to from her room to her sister’s door, she knocked and said.

“Hey V, can I come in.” Allison said.

“Sure,” she hollered not looking up from her studies.

Allison opened the door. She went in and sat on the bed.

“Can we talk about something?”

Vanessa looked up from her work she was doing and said,

“Sure, what do you want?”

“Well, I need to tell you something, but you can’t tell mom or anyone, you promise?” She said looking around the room.

“O.K, shoot for it.”

“Well I don’t know how to tell you or anyone else this but, uh, I made a mistake a-a-and,” she didn’t finish the sentence, for her sister butted in.

“Allison, no you can’t be, please tell me you’re not.” Vanessa said shaking her head. By this time Allison was in tears when she told her sister this.

“I wish, but I am going to be, I’m pregnant.” She strained to say the last two words.

“Allison how could you?” she said fiercely, while getting up.

“I don’t know, I was pressured into doing it, it was an accident.” She said getting up to get a tissue.

“Accidents like this don’t happen. They are made on purpose. What were you thinking? Oh I’ll tell you what you were thinking; you thought if you did this it would ease your problems in life. Well Allison it doesn’t ok. How could you let this happen when your only fourteen, couldn’t you wait until you were married or at least till you were older. This is going to effect your whole life, our life. Mom is a single woman, dad isn’t here anymore. How do you expect us to do financially with seven kids and one parent and one more baby in the house? You’re going to be a mother at fourteen and you’re only in ninth grade and just starting high school. When did this happen?” Vanessa was calming her voice after the last sentence was made.

“Well about almost about three months ago,” Allison said.

“Three months ago? You mean you’re already twelve weeks. Very soon your body is going to under go dramatic changes. Like morning sickness, sleepiness, and your stomach is going to grow larger. And when do you expect mom to find out about this. And what kind of role model are you going to set for Elisabeth and Isabella; you’re two years older than Elisabeth and three years older than Isabella. What kind of big sister are you going to be to them, when you’re pregnant at fourteen? Do you expect them to be a mother at your age too?”

She looked down at the ground when the question was put on her. A tear ran down her cheek when she said,

“I guess no.”

“Look, Allison, I am sorry for yelling at you, ok. I want to know who the father of this baby is?” Vanessa said as she sat down holding her hand.

“Well, he is a tenth grader, Cole Wells”

“Is he going to be in the baby’s life, have you told him you were pregnant with his baby? And how did this come to happen? Vanessa said releasing her hand to get a tissue for Allison, who has now quit sobbing.

“Well, I haven’t told him about the baby. How it happened?”

“Yes, I want to know how it happened!”

“Well in the summer my friend, Hannah, had a party and well I met Cole and it sorda just took off from their.”

“Took off from their. Why didn’t you wait till you were married? O.k. I want ask you anymore I see that you are getting sensitive to this. Well anyways, how do you expect to tell mom about this problem you have created now?”

“I don’t know. I guess some how or I can just let her guess about the pregnancy.” Allison replied to the question.

“Al, you can’t just let her guess about it. You need help with the pregnancy, you can’t do this alone!” She said getting agitated.

“I won’t be alone I have you and Cole.”

“Allison you can’t trust a guy who made you pregnant, who didn’t even want you to become with child, plus you haven’t even told him about the pregnancy.”

“And why not? We could have been planning to anyways.” She answered feisty.

“What? Why would you two plan on becoming parents at age fourteen and fifteen? Do you not get it you’re fourteen, you’re pregnant at FOURTEEN!” Vanessa said fiercely.

Allison could tell Vanessa was getting angrier as