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usaforklift asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

I wanted to start with this so-common, cliched phrase, then wander off on my own. OK?

breath of sea

come and take a walk with me

down to the raging boundless sea

down to the surf-torn tides and sand

beyond the cliffs to the edge of land

come to the sea horizon-bent

carved by the weight of sight and sound

to this pool of life we scarcely know

take my hand and come, let’s go

dawn breaks the gray-cast wilderness

time moves this restless space beyond

we – two simple creatures stand

to share the mysteries of our bond

deep in sleep the sea meets sky

where rain is torn with relentless cry

where heavens open unto the night

the source of life beckons the light

we are too of ages told

our first and last meet here as one

oh sea of whispers cry and moan

your pirouette awaits the sun

i clasp your hand in wonderment

the bursting bells and tinkling light

this vast unceasing churning form

is truest true and rightest right

i speak in silence hollow sound

i yearn to cry out – draw you near

I think your mist will be my strength

my love will last another year

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  • 1 decade ago
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    Changed my mind. Here I am revisiting.....going out can wait.

    As I said 'So different from your usual style' but, this has everything I like in poetry. It rhymes (but you are confident enough to abandon a strict rhyme where necessary) it has a wonderful rhythm and has something to say. Cliches are only cliches (for me) if there is no thought behind the familiar phrase....you use all that language provides and make the end product uniquely your own.

    Love it.

    (husband breathing down my neck, must dash)

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    aaaaw! That's so heart warming and loving poem! It made me cry for happiness for you and how you felt along that day with forever memories! I love your poems!!! Keep up the great fantastic work!Such deep meaning in each poem! ;)

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