My little dreamy floating-away poem. Short version or long version?

short version

breezes speak in the rustling leaves

bathe my skin with a thousand flowers

i see myself in the distance

beckoning come to me

oh lost stranger

I am saying

will you awaken too soon

to know of heaven in the distance?

your shining hair

extending hand

me to me

across the heavy distance

and through the infinite space

palm to palm you say

the loneliness needn’t be

the universe is spoken

through the hearts of lovers

all time and space

and earth and sky and God

are passing here

within the breath of angels

i hear the music of the grasses

alone in this meadow of the sun

sweet pasture of light

as evening comes

the world turns

long version

in the golden rods of twilight

in the gleaming air of dusk

the gentling hews of nightfall as i walk

the song of little sparrows

floats off in time immemorial

across the universe

and to the farthest places

we shall never know

they sing to raise me in my stumbling step

my feet bathed and brushed in the gentle grasses

the giant walks staunchly by

across the tips and spears

just one of us

one spear speaks to another

yes, but heavy-set, or rather, isn’t he?

the breezes speak in the rustling leaves

bathe my skin with the scent of a thousand flowers

i see myself approaching in the distance

beckoning come to me

oh lost stranger

boy here i am

will you awaken too soon

to know of heaven in the distance?

your shining hair

extending hand

me to me

across the heavy distance

and through the infinite space

palm to palm you say

the loneliness needn’t be

the universe is spoken

through the hearts of lovers

all time and space

and earth and sky and God

are passing here

within the breath of angels

i hear the music of the grasses

alone in this meadow of the sun

sweet pasture of dandelion and flower

as evening takes the greens and limes away

and brings the grays and golden browns

of rest

and the soon-to-be grasses-of-tomorrow

are quick

to erase the memory of my heavy shoe

in the passing