What do you guys think of my poem? Please read! :D?

The emotions begin to tear,

My willingness to answer begins to form,

Whether my words are battered and worn,

You won't get any answer besides, A new poem is born.

The poem filled me with such emotion,

As you can see, my heart's inspired-

Err.. I ran out of lines :S

Anyways, I loved the poem, you did a great job with the emotional value.

I think it's awesome man well except for the part that goes ...

"Don't ask me how i feel

for the answer i give you wont be real

I wont burden you with the pain and the stress

For happiness on the outside is different on the inside and on the inside my heart's just a mess" you might want to check it over again It doesn't exactly flow like the rest of it does but other then that cool! I think whoever your family is will be proud plus it really caught my attention.

Good start. Needs technical advice. I like the first six lines, then the next two lines, All of my tears, all of my fears, is overdone. tears, fears, too easy.

Lines 9 and 12 are awkward.

You said to be honest. You have a feel for writing, but like anything else, it takes a lot of work and practice to be really good. Keep at it.

i relly enjoyed reading

your poem

unlike others

that just put words together

bcuz they rhyme

but they don't make any sense

yours was well thought out

it had a rhythm and made sense

all in all a great poem

:]

thats really good :)

you are amazing!!!