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felix
Lv 4
felix asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

.......................................if i wrote a poem..................?

read this...tell me what you think...please don't spare my feelings, if you thought is sucked say so...

The View From On Top of My Desk Looks Pretty Bleak

Two

Apple-cores

were sitting on my desk

my midnight snack from last night, now shriveled and brown

and they said, I'd rather be dead than old and cold sitting here like this, useless

so i threw them away.

Some people said it was wrong so they made posters and yelled up at my window and they wrote a letter to the news.

and the news made a huge production of it all. Three rings, top hat, lions and tiger, the whole deal.

But everyone knows news people have no souls, so i didn't care.

Then the apple-cores

came back from beyond on a white cloud and asked what all the fuss was about, but nobody said a word.

Not a word.

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  • Amanda
    Lv 4
    1 decade ago
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    I thought it was pretty interesting. I don't get the spacing though, why is it

    Two

    Apple-cores

    were sitting on my desk.

    instead of it all being on one line? and some lines are so long...

  • 1 decade ago

    It was very creative, and I like the inner message in it. keep up the good work.

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