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What Do You Think Of My Lyrics?

It's called THE BLUE HOUR. It's about my best guy friend's ex cheating on him.

Verse 1:

Now that your connection is at death,

you only have a little time to hold your breath,

and say that I was right.

But I'll let you just cry tonight.

You gave her your heart

And she tore it apart.

But I'll be the one who you can talk to,

who will listen.

No matter what you do,

I won't keep you from running.

As your world turns to black,

well I'll be around.

Just don't make a sound.

Chorus:

I know you thought you'd be together forever.

At least you never surrendered.

Your once so strong connection is now at death.

I'll let you just hold your breath, tonight.

As we come to the blue hour of your darkest day,

just realize I'll be here for you everyday.

Verse 2:

She told you she'd be there till the end.

If you had turned around

you'd know that I was your friend.

When you would kiss goodnight,

you never knew that I was right.

Your heart will not bleed for eternity.

I'll save your heart from insanity.

And tonight, I will let you cry.

Chorus

Verse 3:

I hate to say that I was right.

I'm sure you'll run outta tears tonight.

I guess you can't always forgive and forget.

At least now you're surrounded by serenity.

Your heart will not bleed for eternity.

Just know I'm always around.

I won't make a sound.

I won't letyou fall to the ground.

Just be here alone with me now.

Chorus.

That's it! Hope you liked it!

8 Answers

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago
    Favorite Answer

    i also write lyrics

    and sometimes they sound good written out rhyming, but

    when its actually put into a song, it sounds better when not

    everything rhymes. i think you should re-frase some lines.

    it sounds a little to poetic.

    but the lyrics are strong and beautiful and obviously come from

    your heart. and thats really all the matters.

    i think you are a pretty good song writer.

    maybe you should also consider poetry? :]

  • 1 decade ago

    wow uh it rythmes a lot. little too much. Songs dont have to rythme you know. I like the chorus-but the line with blue hour makes no sense and i would replace the word death with something else-its too harsh.

  • 1 decade ago

    HONESTLY...it sounds okay but it's a little wordy. Try to simplify it and avoid phrases like 'just know I'm always around...I won't let you fall to the ground' because it sounds...welll...I don't know how to describe it but not good. I hope that helped.

    Keep writing!!!

  • 1 decade ago

    Too many forced rhymes, sorry didn't like.

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  • it's ok.

    <3

    i guess

  • 1 decade ago

    its good lyrics but a bit dark...

  • 1 decade ago

    that's good!

  • 1 decade ago

    Please. No more relationship songs.

    Source(s): Me.
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