Let Know What You Think About My Song Pleas?

No one can hear him now, he is out there on his own.

Can you please help him sir? He has gone war.

Dear God please help him through. Let him come home safe and sound To his family and friends who loves him so.

All he does lay there and think about the what he would be doing now and if he will live to see another day. He just wants to get away from war.

Everyone can hear now. He is not alone.No you don't need to help him sir. He is home from war.

Dear god thanks for helping him through. Thanks for letting him come home safe and sound. to his family and friends who love him so.

No one can hear him now He is out there on his own. can you please help him sir? He has gone to war.

This song is about my brothers hwhois in the marines and they have both gone to war and came home and will be going back. Please be ttruthfuland I will take any suggestions