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Okay... I am so not good at Grammar, and I really need help editing my thoughts. like for example putting everything into place with all the commas, and everything. first person to edit it right gets 10 points.
Here is where I need help editing/fixing.
A Beautiful Transformation
When Jesus was on earth he took things that were already there, and tansformed them into something better, something beautiful! Jesus healed the blind man who already had eyes, and transformed them into eyes that see. He transformed the deaf man's ears, that he already had, into ears that hear! He took the cripled man's legs, that he already had, and transformed them into legs that move! But the most important thing that he did was giving himself up for us, so our lives that we already have, can be transformed in him, and can be something beautiful! A life worth living! And even though there are struggles, and sin in our life, there will be a day with no more tears, no more pain, and no more fear. All you have to do is accept his free gift, and be transformed from your old ugly self, and become someone beautiful!.
Romans 12:2 Do not conform any longer to the pattern of this world, but be TRANSFORMED by the renewing of your mind.
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- 1 decade agoFavorite Answer
here's what I would do: changes in parenthesis
When Jesus was on earth, he took things that were already there, and
(transformed) them into something better, something beautiful! Jesus
healed the blind man (with eyes that can see), the deaf man (heard), the crippled man was healed so he could walk and the most important thing he did was that he gave himself for us so that our lives can be transformed into lives that are worth living for and we will be beautiful not just the ugly people we were before sin.
Once we accept his free gift and we will become something beautiful and good. There will be a day that will have no more tears, no more pain, and not more fear. There will be struggles and yes there is sin but with God All Things Are Possible.
I really enjoyed this poem. It just reminded me of why we were put here on earth by him so we should give him glory, honor and praise especially in the times of our struggles.
