similes and metaphors needed!?

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i need help adding similes and metaphors to my poem! please help :)


It had been a year 
since she had seen him last.
letters weren't enough
to comfort her heartache.
She smoothed her dark hair,
bit her poppy red lips
and fluffed her skirt 
to calm the butterflies
and the deafening sound 
of her heart beating
once, twice, a third time.
she glanced at her letters,
leafing through to find the best,
the one which said he was safe, 
he was coming home.
she heard a sound, 
leaving the letter, 
and dashed to the window.
taking a deep breath, 
she peered out the window
once, twice, a third time
and in a jiffy 
she opened the door
and hugged her soldier 
who had come home.
once, twice, a third time.
leaving a poppy red print 
on his happy face.

micheleann62 · Accepted Answer

I answered your first time of asking for help with this poem. I think his is much better written. Your metaphor is still needed. It might help if I tell you what a metaphor might be contained in this poem.
It was why I added the line "It felt like twenty" Metaphor when I edited it before.
taking a deep breath, that felt to be shallow wisps of air,(metaphor)she peered out the window as though peering into a chrystal ball (metaphor) and in a jiffy which felt as though a hundred eons passed (metaphor) .

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