What is this heirloom of my house?

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Heirloom

Heirloom tomatoes in the hands
Of a prince of France,
Beckoning from the glossy page
Of Gourmet Magazine,
Appealed to the eye of a son
Sitting at a kitchen table
Who proposed to his parents a trip
To feed the deferred dream
His mother long had nurtured of travel. 
A mother, a father and a French chateau
Made memories for a lifetime,
And when they returned there was joy
And when death came too soon
Uninvited, to dine, and the wine 
Was all poured out
And mom was suddenly gone, 
The memory of that last trip
Remained fragrant
Like a ripe tomato in a summer field.

Anonymous · Accepted Answer

I can see what your saying, however, there is I believe more that can be gained from the picture you’ve painted and a stronger rhyme I believe would give it more impact.

I see your poem like this:-



A prince appeals to the eye of a son
From a glossy page of a Gourmet Magazine
Sitting at a kitchen table
A young boy with a deferred dream

Mother, Father and I
Making those memories of a lifetime,
Mother who longed nurtured of travel
Of French chateaus, and red wine

Happiness is a ripe tomato in a summer’s field.
Drawn by a little boy with a crayon
They returned with joy, but life poured out
And mom was suddenly gone, 

The memory of that trip remains fragrant
But when death comes, it comes too soon
Uninvited, it dines, upon the wine of life
Unabated it has no wish to commune

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