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Path of Shadows or Et Earn Etty, which poem do you like better?
PATH OF SHADOWS
Unpublished work Copyright © 2010 by the author
Sheets of it come pouring down
some just see it
Some love it...
Others will fight it.
But it keeps on falling.
I lie awake here
sleep rarely visits me...
as elusive
as what I search for
in these cold, lonely places
it's dark and restless
but it's shallow and fleeting...
It smells sweet,
at first.
Then illusion fades,
truth illuminated
the scent ripens, rots.
I've kept searching.
My darkness deepens further
but I do not stop!
How far will I go?
I'm not sure I have the answer.
Dizzying heights,
stomach churning falls,
this persistence is frightening.
Yet the curtains remain still
the drapes drawn so tightly.
It lingers...
the chill engulfs, intensifies.
Time's bony fingers
reek of remembrance,
tightening its grip.
Trudging on.
Trudging on.
ET EARN ETTY
Unpublished work Copyright © 2010 by the author
I've found peace in seclusion,
I've found comfort within.
The tunnel through eternity
widens.
The words form in my mind
But are they fancy or fact?
Fear
Uncertainty
Maintaining my grasp
as tenuous as it is
becomes easier
as times winds whisper,
urging,
compelling,
forcing me forward.
I do not look back
quite as often.
Yet those glances behind continue
over my shoulder
as I feel its breath on my neck.
Its gaze
penetrating,
revealing.
I cannot hide
for I know who I am.
Acceptance
is required
as much as regret
restricts,
constricts.
Still,
pressure builds
ever increasing
ever onward
as the journey that wears many faces
never ends...
Pamela, I appreciate your opinion and the time you took to read them and answer, but I am curious...what do you think they mean? I don't often share the inspiration behind my poems or what they truly mean. You found them discomforting and felt as if I were an unhappy soul if they are from my heart, I would truly be interested to hear why! :) Thank you!!!
2 Answers
- Anonymous1 decade agoFavorite Answer
I have enjoyed both your poems, however, in the second poem i found; Restricts, Constricts
a little jarring so for that reason I would say the first one
- PamelaLv 61 decade ago
I found them both a little discomforting.
If they are from the heart, you seem an unhappy soul.
ET EARN ETTY
I've found peace in seclusion,
I've found comfort within.
Considering the rest of Et Earn Etty, I am surprised those lines do not read:
I've found no peace in seclusion,
I've found no comfort within.
But I admit, I know nothing about poetry.
I am just expressing feelings.