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would you like to read my poem? #02?
this is just a poem that came to my mind today.....
YoU:::
sometimes i say you mean nothing to me
because i think i mean nothing to you
sometimes youre the person i hate to see
because i dont think you want to see me
sometimes i will call you best friend
because i want to hear that im yours too
but you never say a word
so i shrug my shoulders
and i say
you mean nothing to me anyway
opinions?
4 Answers
- Anonymous1 decade agoFavorite Answer
It's great
- Anonymous1 decade ago
your first few lines are pretty good. since you have a lot of repetition in this poem, you should try to bring it out more.
Also, starting with line five, you begin to lose the same meter. Since I think you'd be the most comfortable writing in Blank Verse, you should look up the constituents, or at least know that it is in iambic pentameter. If you don't know what that means, look it up.
And like i said, use your repetition and alliteration. And then also help keep up the idea that this is a never ending cycle for you. I think if you style it correctly with the right wording you can have a very effective poem.
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- ttteo0328Lv 61 decade ago
Sometimes you said something
but I couldn`t really know what you mean
so i shrug my shoulders
it just comes to my mind
it`s natural and doesn`t mean anything.
Anyway that`s what i think.nothing.