what do you think of this story? its supposed to be a horror story/comedy?

august 5 2011

seven kids go in a cave,they are about 15 years old, there names are george,larry,kendall,ralph,sidney,amanda,and roger

they come across a unusually dark corner so they send larry it to stand in it, only for a second, so he does, then these dark spiderlike claws dig into his shoulders, go through his leg,through his arms, hes bleeding and screaming and it pulls him up into the ceiling, so they try escapeing, but it caved in, and they wandered around the cave looking for an exit, they saw an unusually red glowing light and went toward it, they saw larry suspended by the claws and bleeding, he was trying to speak but blood was gushing out of his mouth, he was saying that they abandoned him, and that they are going to die, then he had a sezire and died, so then he was pulled back up and eaten, the kids wandered around more and saw an odd shadow, they ignored it until it got very close, they stared at it for a second and then froze, it was a spider looking thing, so they run, sadly amanda and roger where closest, amanda was killed instantly by a claw through the eye, roger wasnt so lucky, he had 2 claws through his kneecaps and it dragged him away, george chased after them but after the sounds of his footsteps faded he was left behind, and then the group went farther and saw a door, and went into it to see a dimly lit lab with a crazed scientist mumbling to himself in a corner, he had c4 and a detonator in his hand, and a 357.magnum on the table, the c4 was in his lap, and the kids talked him down, he warned them that these experements where violent and they where once human, he told of how he abducted small children and exposed them to chemicals, kendall then picked up the magnum and ralph got the detonator out of his hand and sidney got the c4 and then kendall shot the scientist between the eyes, then as they where leaving the room kendall stops, puts the gun to his head and shoots himself, ralph picked up the gun and they continued through the cave, they came across another room, they went in and the room was littered with the mutilated bodies of small children, they left the room and found a small hole in the cave, they then blew a hole in the cave and escaped, exept they didnt know how to handle c4 very well and ralph was killed in the blast, then as sidney is exiting the cave george comes crawling over, covered in blood, angry as hell, and picked up the gun she left on the floor and is about to shoot her when she runs over and crushes his windpipe under her shoe and gets the gun, she goes back to her hous and its late, there is an eerie silence when she gets there and looks around, here is blood everywhere and the power is out, so she goes in the kitches to see the mangled corpses of her family and then she runs out of the house, she hears the things in the woods surrounding her so she waits, one dosent see her and she jumps up and shoots it in the head, it slumps down and then she finds a shack, she goes in and sees one of her friends who wasnt with them, his corpse is half eaten and rotting, so she runs out, and she goes into town screaming for help but its deserted, every building she finds it covered in corpses and blood, she sees one slowly walking through an alley and hides, it sees her and charges, she shoots it but anoter hears the gunshot and jumps off the roof and stabs her through both calves, she drops the gun and twitches in pain and cant even scream, she is dragged through the streets and it makes a terrible bone chilling sound and more start to come, they start eating her alive right there, shes still concious and they pass a corpse with a knife on it, she takes it and cuts off her legs and starts to crawl away, she makes it into a building and they dont notice, they keep eating the legs, she hides in an office and hears noises outside,its them they are coming up for her, after an agonizing 10 seconds the sounds stop and she hears artillery fire, the military has come to save her, she stops the bleeding from her legs with cloths stolen from corpses and her other wounds arent so bad, she crawls for a window and sees the monsters lit on fire and being shot with acr's and m16's and artillery, the military overruns the town, she notices a mother and her baby was in the room with her, frozen in fear, an infantry team comes to the room, she begs them to save her but they just shoot her in the head, then her child, they see the injured girl and shoot a few m16 rounds into her chest, shes dead, the military covers it up and says it was a disease that wiped out the small town, but what they didnt know is that one of the experements breached the perimeter they set and it was carrying eggs, it hatched them in a cave and they multiplied and the fun was about to start for another town