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sly­ asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

Feedback on this poem please :)?

Opinions, good or bad, are welcome. I just want to know what I need to improve on and what I did well. Thanks :)

Map to my heart

He took it,

That map to my heart,

And cupid,

Shot me with that dart.

Now I'm under his spell,

Falling so deep,

Until he lets me go,

And I am left to weep.

I dont think he'll find it,

Or even try,

I just wish he had the decency

To tell me goodbye.

I've lost it,

That map to my heart,

This boy has it,

I think he ripped it apart.

And cupids arrow,

Is still stabbed in my back,

Now my heart is breaking,

WIth every little crack

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    Wow....this is really really good. Very vivid! I hope this poem isn't true. If so that guy needs to get his *** kicked!!!

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    I think that is a really well written poem, it rhymes and it makes sense.

    Source(s): my heart
  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    That is a really good poem.

  • 1 decade ago

    helthy rhythm and repetition

    nice!

    sum vocab can be upgraded

    LOVE STANZA 3

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  • 1 decade ago

    Nice! Keep writing :)

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