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Hanna:D asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

i have a poem. im a little rusty from not writing in a few months but i need oponions?

im brain dead but i just had an urge to write. its how i feel about music. it doesnt have a title. i know it sucks but i dont need you to tell me that. i cant seem to think of the right words tonight but here it is.

i feel it. i feel the fury.

the rage.

the passion.

i feel the words, the rhythym,

surge through me.

the sensation overwhelms.

i feel the steadiness.

i listen.

the intensity is astounding

its loud.

im breathless.

its not done, obviousley. but i just wanted to share and get oponions

Update:

skittles: i guess im saying that because im usually happy with what i write but not so much this poem. i just wanted to write because i have a huge passion for music, but like i said; im brain dead. i also said it sucked because im scared of getting bad oponions on my writing because i put a lot into it, even if it doesnt show in this poem. i dont like people reading what i write because i always thinks it sucks even though it doesnt most of the time (i've been published) and im young so im not expierenced. i just wanted to get oponions here, since i dont know these people personally so they're oponions dont mean quite as much to me even though i do appreciate them.

B: screw you. kthanks.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    It had a good rhythm to it, but I think it needs more images.

  • 1 decade ago

    Right now My brain isn't working properly. But you said you know it sucks then why are you asking? Not that I think it sucks too I'm just wondering... Like I said, my brain isn't working right so no comment.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    SHUT UP!!!!!!!!!!!!

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