How can he love her? LONG STORY, READ DESCRIPTION!?

Well, first off I like the Oregon part because, well, I live there. Though you should pick a spot - Eugene sounds ideal, it's a medium sized college town surrounded by woods and rivers and whatnot but with enough night life to have an all ages club (in theory).

Your first question is easy to resolve: I mean, it's not like Lynz and her mom got off the plane/train/bus and Lynz immediately got sent out to party. If school isn't involved, then have Lynz wander... wherever you feel like having her wander. Maybe a smaller town like Corvallis (still college town, still hip) and she hangs out in the cafes and he sees her there... or maybe there's some little patch of wildnerness she likes to ramble in, and while she does Daniel watches. Show all the small things she does that makes him fall in love with her, like saving birds fallen out of nests and making friends with the wildlife; have her talk to herself - she's a weird emo kid, so that's par for the course. She talks to herself, and Daniel listens and falls in love. First problem solved. Oh, and as to the shadow, I think it would be nice to weave in some bit about how there's an ancient legend or somesuch that you may be clueless, but your shadow will always find your true love. As to the needle, I'd say they sort of hypnotize her somehow.

So time goes on, and Lynz can't stop thinking about all this crazy stuff. Too late! Time for school, and she meets Luke, who is... solid. Like a rock she can cling to in any storm. And you're missing a deer, there are tons of them in Oregon, so my best guess is that is what Luke turns into. So he's calm and affectionate and peaceful and wants to keep her away from the others, who aren't bad by any means but are into hunting and being predatory. But Daniel is deeply seductive, plus she knows she loves him. So she's torn, all while trying to keep up a normal front at school while she learns about her new powers, etc. And then...

OF COURSE Law comes to Oregon, followed closely by Scott, who is always following Law and trying to keep him out of trouble, but this time means so much more because he knows he'll see Lynz, too. They arrive, and now Lynz has to scramble to keep her secret. Law is trying to make things up with her, but there's no way he's gonna win. No, he's going to get very distracted by a very interesting piece of tail... and we mean that literally, because it's Hayley the panther chick that has caught his eye. While he pursues her, Scott tries to get closer to Lynz - but of course Lynz has her secrets to keep and it's becoming harder and harder to convince Scott that Luke and Daniel are just ordinary suitors. Finally something terrible happens - an incursion of outsiders maybe? I don't know, whatever, this is your story. Luke bites the dust because he couldn't protect himself in deer form... but he does it nobly, turning into his animal shape and diverting whatever the danger is away from Lynz, who in turn is forced to transform in order to save Scott, thus giving up the secret to him. Meanwhile, Law has been kidnapped or something... he's in grave danger. They have to rescue him. Daniel and Lynz team up, insert excitement here and during the course of it they can no longer deny their love. Law is rescued, he's together with Hayley; Daniel and Lynz are finally, joyously resigned to fate... which leaves Scott, alone and heartbroken until a girl approaches him and says, "Excuse me but... you seem to have my shadow."

Hope you like it kiddo and if you need anymore help you can find me at laurastewart4669@yahoo.com... I think. I've kind of fallen in love with this story already, so I really want to know where we go from here...

To answer your questions:

Since you have so many other supernatural elements, perhaps Daniel could fall in love with Lynz on sight or through a prophecy because they are soul mates, similar to the way the werewolves in Twilight imprint.

As to which guy she should choose, that depends on the way the story develops.

The name "Luke" seems similar to "lupine," as in wolf.

And honestly, I couldn't follow the story well enough to remember who or where Law is.

Now to make some suggestions:

First of all, don't stereotype your characters. Calling characters "emo" and then saying that they cut themselves is going to seriously offend your intended audience. Try to make your characters more realistically original than the average "emo" teen or the usual HOT love interest.

Second, although it may seem like a good idea to you now, you'll realize later in life that it's highly impractical to make a huge move "just for change." Does Lynz's mom have family in Oregon? Was she offered a job there? Was is a favorite childhood vacation place? What connection does she have to this location that makes is her safe haven after being left by her father's child?

Your third issue is the manner in which you present the background information. You can choose to give it all in the beginning, rather than incorporating it into the story, but don't do it quite so bluntly. Perhaps create a prologue in the form of a diary entry explaining the past few years, or have Lynz reflect over the events leading to her move as they make the trip. Don't just shove it all in the reader's face.

I'm sure you'll further develop the fantasy elements of your story, so I won't comment on them, but may I suggest that the teens in the woods tell Lynz the contents of the red syringe is a type of hallucinogen? Maybe she wants to try drugs to numb the pain?

1) I hope your original idea will work. This is still while she lived in New York. Even though he lived in Oregon, one day when he fell asleep, he saw a gray wolf in his dream. The wolf ran at him, sucked him in, and he *became* the wolf. In the dream the wolf was a gray shadow, it's form of camouflage being to take the shape of anyone's shadow around him, to blend with the ground. The wolf/Daniel was far from home in the dream. He hopped to one girl's shadow (Lynz) as she was sneaking out at night, and out of curiosity, stayed with her. He liked the girl, she intrigued him, and since the dream thing continued, he took his own form when he could but remained a shadow. Whenever he had the chance he would return to the dream-girl and watch her. Even sometimes if he fell asleep during the day, in class or something, he would go to her. He only realized she wasn't a dream when he met her in Oregon.

2) She should choose Luke but eventually end up with Daniel, for the sake of drama.

3) Alright, I've thought of something. Something happens to Scott that brings him to near death - maybe he gets really sick? Law comes to visit her in Oregon and tells her what happened and then that he wants her back. She had begun falling for Luke (This is before she ends up with Daniel which I hope will happen) but still has some feelings for Law and over the years had developed a slight crush on Scott. She's really confused of course, and unsure what she should do, but goes back to NY with him to see Scott. He's not doing well, and (I hate to do this but I kill a lot of characters if you don't like this you don't HAVE to add it) eventually dies. She thinks about what Law said about wanting her back but now every single time she looks at his face she sees Scott, not hard since they're twins. Even though he's already in pain, she tells him he broke her heart once and she's not ready to go through that again. Now Scott and Law are out of the picture and Luke and Daniel are left. After Scott's death, Lynz returns to Oregon and Luke helps her through it. Daniel's heartbroken, but she dumps Luke after she finds him...in a room with Hayley. She starts slitting her wrists again (if she ever stopped, otherwise, more) and isn't ready for another relationship, obviously. There should be something else going on to that has to do with the animal-people and adding to her stress. After a while Daniel tries to convince her he won't break her heart, and tells her about all the times he watched her - how he understood her. Lynz is sad that she can't be with him, especially because she knows he's being honest and means what he says, but she tells him she just isn't ready for another relationship.

4) I think he should morph into a small, fierce animal. Like a weasel or a raccoon. Sure seems like a weasel to me! Or...the character I made him! :3

5) Yup! That was answered in question 3!

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to start off very good story the guy i think she should choose would have 2 be daniel .the next thing that i think should happen would be that scott should come to oregen.and the animal i think that luke should be able to turn in to would be a bear

1. maybe like he is kinda phycic and saw that lnyz was everything he wanted. or they have some weird history that has them all be reincarnated over and over. idk i like the phycic idea. ohh! or maybe his phycic powers told him she was fragile and really hurt and he wanted to help.

2. luke. but have him not ask her to be his mate right away. only cuz hed the only one that isnt already smitten with her. i feel like if she chooses any other shes pressured into loving them. she should be the one to pick who she wants. :( hook law up with some1 amazing i like him.

3. tons of romance drama i love romance! but maybe some huge problem that onlythe animal teens can fix.

4. white wolf?

5.yes!!!!!! maybe live with her for a while.

Wow. That was very long and imaginative. I like it!

Don't forget to say what happens to the mom. Does she die, or something??

Anyhoo, I think you should wait it out. You don't have to know the end until you get there.

I got bored after the first few sentences.