Will you comment and/or critique please?

Blessings. Very nice poem kind of inspirational and searching in within one self, i like that very much i see strong affection, and benevolence, ones life purpose is the very foundation of our life, stick with your purpose and you will mature spiritually. I see your deep point. Peace out.......If you ever need a friend call me , if you ever need some one to talk to call me......Joyce_m2006b@yahoo.com

Pray to your God,

tell him the way you feel..

and perhaps in his love

he will his plan reveal

You are so very young,

life really just begun

Each day you have brung

yes brung....

a fragment of the sun

into a dismal room

far from the one your in

where it may seem a tomb

lightness will now begin

to seep in gently warm

This isn't bad, actually. I'm not a big fan of poetry, and If I were to add any kind of criticism, I would encourage you to focus more on word play and, especially alliteration. It doesn't necessarily have to be heavy handed, but alliterating just a couple of words adds a more interesting twist.

once I write it fairly is like i'm drawing the poison out of my soul. It provides me convenience and alleviation. save writing my costly pal. Expressing ones thoughts in words or music is extreme artwork and a great variety of therapy for cases once you're Blue.

Very strong and self assured. I like it. You really have a wonderful way with poetry.

I love this one! It's shows that ur positive and strong, and you wont give up, even though hardest of times. Nice write..once again

:)

Really shows how you feel. About what, I don't know. That leaves me thinking. Lovely.

strong poem

that...was...beautiful

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